Internet— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，句子结构不完整，且有重复和冗余。建议注意句子完整性，避免断句错误，并使用更自然流畅的表达。

例: I started using the Internet when I was about nine years old. At that time, I also learned to type and participated in a typing competition at school. Since then, the Internet has become an important part of my life.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和连接词，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Nowadays, I go online many times a day because we live in a world connected by the Internet. I usually go online for shopping and to stay connected with my friends. Therefore, the Internet has become an essential part of my daily life.

提案: 回答较为完整，但句子较长且有些重复。建议使用更简洁的句子结构，并适当使用连接词提高连贯性。

例: I remember a time in primary school when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet on weekdays. My parents were worried that too much screen time would distract me from my studies, so they set this rule to help me focus.

提案: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误和用词不当。建议注意时态一致性和动词形式，使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, especially on social media, whether browsing the news or chatting with my friends. Therefore, I try to limit my Internet use and stay focused on my daily routines.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整，句子结构混乱。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并使用恰当的连接词。

例: Without the Internet, I would rely more on traditional ways to get information, such as reading newspapers and books. I would also spend more time chatting with my friends face to face, which would be a good opportunity to practice my writing skills.

× I started using the Internet when I was about. Nine years old and that's the time when I first learned to type and I tend to take part in.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was about nine years old, and that's the time when I first learned to type and I tended to take part in.

句中描述过去发生的动作，动词时态应使用过去式。"tend"应改为过去式"tended"，表示过去经常参加。

× and since then the Internet becomes the importance.

✓ and since then the Internet has become important.

"becomes"时态错误，应使用现在完成时"has become"表示从过去到现在的变化；"the importance"用法错误，应改为形容词"important"。

× Nowadays thank go online many times a day because we are living in a world connected by the Internet and I'm maybe go online for shopping and staying connected with my friends and so the Internet has become and since you're part of my daily life.

✓ Nowadays, I go online many times a day because we are living in a world connected by the Internet. I may go online for shopping and to stay connected with my friends, so the Internet has become a part of my daily life.

句子结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，"thank"应为"I"，"I'm maybe go"应改为"I may go"，"staying"应改为不定式"to stay"，"has become and since you're part"语义不通，改为"has become a part"。

× As I can recall time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet and I remember that was when I was in my primary school and I wasn't allowed to go on the Internet during weekdays because my parents fear that if they don't limit my screen time, it may distract me from the studies.

✓ As I can recall, there was a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet. I remember that was when I was in primary school, and I wasn't allowed to go on the Internet during weekdays because my parents feared that if they didn't limit my screen time, it might distract me from my studies.

描述过去事件，动词时态应为过去式，如"fear"改为"feared"，"don't limit"改为"didn't limit"，"may"改为过去式"might"。

× Of course, I do think I spent too much time online, especially on social media, whether is browsing the news or chatting with my friends.

✓ Of course, I do think I spend too much time online, especially on social media, whether it is browsing the news or chatting with my friends.

时态错误，描述现在情况应使用现在时"spend"而非过去时"spent"；"whether is"缺少主语，应为"whether it is"。

× So I try to limit my time on the Internet and staying focus on my daily routines.

✓ So I try to limit my time on the Internet and stay focused on my daily routines.

"staying"应改为动词不定式"stay"以保持句子结构一致；"focus"应为形容词"focused"修饰主语。

× Without the Internet, I think I would rely more on the traditional in information collections for example, such as newspapers are reading books of chatting with my friends face to face and I think that's a good time I can practice writing and.

✓ Without the Internet, I think I would rely more on traditional information sources, for example, newspapers, reading books, or chatting with my friends face to face. I think that's a good time for me to practice writing.

"in information collections"表达不正确，应为"information sources"；"newspapers are reading books of chatting"结构混乱，应分开列举；句尾不完整，补充完整句子。