Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repeating 'for me' and check articles ("an important organ").

例: Yes — I enjoy science because it helps me understand everyday life. For example, when we study the circulatory system I realise how vital the heart is as an important organ in our body.

提案: Keep answers factual and correct minor mistakes. Use past tense consistently and replace vague phrasing ("may use of") with clear verbs. Limit to one or two supporting details linked logically.

例: I started learning science in elementary school. My teacher was excellent and often used real-life examples, such as bringing plants into class to explain photosynthesis.

提案: Avoid informal fillers like 'personally' and correct prepositions and tense (use 'discussed' or 'discusses' correctly). Provide one clear reason and one specific example with a linking word.

例: I like biology because it focuses on living things and is easy to relate to. For example, when we studied human anatomy I could point to my own body parts to understand the lessons.

提案: Improve clarity and grammar: use correct tense, complete sentences and avoid repetition. Give one clear example and explain what you learned or observed. Remove unfinished fragments.

例: One exciting activity was doing practical experiments in high school. For instance, we observed osmosis by placing potato slices in salt and fresh water, and I learnt how water moves across cell membranes.

提案: Good structure and specific example — tighten language and correct verb tense ("live" not "lived"). Use a linking word and one concise supporting detail.

例: Yes, I enjoy science programmes because they are educational and explain the natural world. For example, on the Discovery Channel I watch how animals live and thrive in the wild, which I find fascinating.

提案: Avoid overgeneralisation and hedging. Start with a direct response, then qualify it and give one reasonable reason. Use neutral, accurate language instead of broad stereotypes.

例: I'm not sure, but I think many Chinese people would be interested in science museums. For example, because there is strong interest in medicine and technology, museums with medical exhibits or interactive displays could attract visitors.

× ...our heart is really important organ in our body.

✓ ...our heart is a really important organ in our body.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun 'important organ'. Use 'a' to indicate one of many; correct usage: 'a really important organ'.

× For instance, she may use of real life scenarios and examples like bringing plants to explain.

✓ For instance, she may use real-life scenarios and examples, like bringing plants to explain.

Incorrect phrase 'may use of' should be 'may use'; 'real-life' is hyphenated as a compound adjective. Also add comma before example. Suggestion: remove 'of' and hyphenate 'real-life'.

× For instance, when our science teacher discussed about human anatomy, I can easily use my body parts as an example.

✓ For instance, when our science teacher discussed human anatomy, I could easily use my body parts as examples.

Verb 'discuss' does not take preposition 'about' in this context; use direct object 'discussed human anatomy'. Tense consistency: past 'discussed' with 'could' or 'was able to' fits better. Also plural 'examples' matches 'body parts'.

× What's so exciting about my science subject was doing experiments when I was in high school.

✓ What was so exciting about my science subject was doing experiments when I was in high school.

Word order for cleft sentence is incorrect; 'What was so exciting' is the correct structure. Maintain past tense 'was'.

× I remember we did some experiments of mixing liquids, for instance, when we do the osmosis process.

✓ I remember we did some experiments mixing liquids, for instance, when we performed the osmosis process.

Use noun phrase 'experiments mixing liquids' (no 'of'), and tense consistency: past 'did' + 'performed' instead of present 'do'.

× It was so entertaining and interesting to do be because you can easily.

✓ It was so entertaining and interesting to do because it was easy to see the effects.

Original sentence has stray 'be' and incomplete clause 'you can easily'. Rephrase to complete thought and maintain past tense: 'it was easy to see the effects' conveys intended meaning.

× Yes, I do like watching science channels because it's not only educational, but it also helps you understand what's happening in the environment.

✓ Yes, I do like watching science channels because they are not only educational, but they also help you understand what is happening in the environment.

Pronoun agreement: 'science channels' plural requires 'they' not 'it'; maintain consistent present tense 'help' and avoid contraction mismatch.

× For instance, I watch Discovery Channel and I see how animals lived and thrive in the wild, which is fascinating to me.

✓ For instance, I watch the Discovery Channel and I see how animals live and thrive in the wild, which is fascinating to me.

Use present tense 'live' to match 'watch' and general truths; include definite article 'the' before channel name.

× To be honest, I don't have quite an understanding about how Chinese people view science museums, but knowing that Chinese really like to study about medicine and all sorts of things, they might probably be interested to visit science museums in their country.

✓ To be honest, I don't have a clear understanding of how Chinese people view science museums, but knowing that Chinese people generally like to study medicine and other subjects, they would probably be interested in visiting science museums in their country.

Use 'a clear understanding' not 'quite an understanding'; preposition 'of' not 'about' after 'understanding'; need 'people' after 'Chinese' for clarity; 'study medicine' no 'about'; 'other subjects' clearer than 'all sorts of things'; use 'interested in visiting' correct collocation and 'would probably' for modality.