Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 후 구체적인 이유와 예시를 명확하고 간결하게 제시하세요. 문법 오류(시제, 관사, 어순)를 수정하고 중복된 단어를 제거하세요. 한 문장으로 주제를 말한 뒤 1~2개의 간단한 뒷받침 문장(이유와 예시)을 연결어(for example, because)로 자연스럽게 이어보세요.

例: Yes, I do. Science has made our lives more convenient because it has produced useful household appliances. For example, vacuum cleaners and washing machines save people a lot of time and effort.

提案: 직접적이고 정확하게 시작 시점을 말하거나 배우지 않았음을 분명히 하세요. 'learn about'의 의미를 고려해 TV로 접한 경험을 간결히 설명하고, 예시는 구체적으로 기술하세요. 문법(조동사, 동사원형, 전치사)을 고치고 연결어(However, instead)를 사용해 흐름을 좋게 만드세요.

例: I didn't formally study science at school, but I started learning about everyday science through TV shows a few years ago. For example, I watched programs about household technology like vacuum cleaners and washing machines.

提案: 주제를 바로 제시하고 관심 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 중복 표현을 피하고 문장 구조를 명확히 하며 연결어(so, because)를 사용해 논리를 정리하세요. 세부사항(우주에서 무엇이 궁금한지)을 추가하면 더 좋습니다.

例: I am most interested in space science because the universe is vast and full of mysteries. For example, I want to learn more about black holes and how planets form, since those topics raise many fascinating questions.

提案: 질문을 이해하고 직접적인 경험 여부를 명확히 답하세요. 'I have no experience'처럼 단정적으로 말한 뒤, TV 시청 등 관찰 경험이나 관심 활동을 구체적으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 자기비하 표현은 피하고 문장을 간결하게 유지하세요.

例: I haven't done many scientific experiments myself, but I often watch science documentaries on TV. For instance, I enjoy programs that explain new technology and space discoveries.

提案: 취향을 명확히 표현한 후 예외(가끔 보는 이유)를 설명하세요. 'curious' 대신 'interesting' 또는 'fascinating' 같은 적절한 형용사를 사용하고 문법(시제, 관사)을 정리하세요.

例: Not really, but I sometimes watch science programs about AI or space because those topics are fascinating. For example, I watched a recent documentary about artificial intelligence and its possible impact on jobs.

提案: 모르겠다면 정직하게 답하고 자신의 경험이나 관찰을 바탕으로 일반적인 추정과 이유를 제시하세요. 중복과 어색한 표현을 줄이고 과거습관(used to)을 쓰거나 일반 현재 시제(usually visit)를 사용해 자연스럽게 말하세요.

例: I'm not sure about China, since I'm Korean, but in my country people usually visit science museums when they are children. For example, schools often organize field trips to science centers to spark students' interest.

× Yes, I like science because science made people to to live more convenience and comfortable.

✓ Yes, I like science because it has made people's lives more convenient and comfortable.

Subject-verb agreement and sentence structure: 'science made people to to live' is incorrect. Use present perfect 'has made' to indicate an effect up to now, use possessive 'people's lives', and adjectives 'convenient' and 'comfortable' (not adverbs). Remove extra 'to'. Suggestion: Use 'it has made people's lives more convenient and comfortable.'

× Our life make a lot of science such as vacuum especially household.

✓ Many scientific inventions affect our lives, especially household devices like the vacuum cleaner.

Sentence structure and word choice: 'Our life make a lot of science' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to a subject ('Many scientific inventions') plus verb ('affect'). Use 'household devices like the vacuum cleaner' for clarity. Suggestion: Start with a clear subject and verb and name examples properly.

× Actually I don't. I didn't learn to science, but I watched on TV a lot of science developments, for example tours, house tours adjust a lot of science such as vacuum cleaner and washing machine.

✓ Actually I haven't. I didn't study science, but I watched many science programs on TV about developments, such as tours showing household technologies like vacuum cleaners and washing machines.

Tense and verb form: 'I don't' vs 'I haven't' depends on intended meaning; here 'I haven't' (learned) or 'I didn't study' is clearer. 'Learn to science' is wrong; use 'study science.' 'Watched on TV a lot of science developments' should be 'watched many science programs on TV about developments.' Suggestion: Use 'study' instead of 'learn to', and 'programs' for TV content; keep tense consistent.

× Actually I don't like science but I choose one. I I interested in space.

✓ Actually I don't like science much, but I chose one: I am interested in space.

Verb + -ing form and tense: 'I interested in space' lacks auxiliary verb; correct is 'I am interested in space.' Also maintain past choice 'chose' for selecting one. Suggestion: Use 'I am interested in...' and correct tense of 'choose' to 'chose' if referring to past choice.

× Space very wide and lots of secret have a lot of secrets.

✓ Space is very vast and has a lot of secrets.

Sentence structure and redundancy: Missing verb 'is' after 'space.' 'Lots of secret have a lot of secrets' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'has a lot of secrets.' Suggestion: Use 'Space is very vast and has many secrets.'

× So I wonder the space science and I.

✓ So I am curious about space science.

Sentence structure and pronoun use: 'I wonder the space science and I' is incorrect. Use 'I am curious about' or 'I wonder about' followed by the topic. Suggestion: Use 'I am curious about space science.'

× No, I don't experience poor about science.

✓ No, I don't have much experience with science.

Word choice and sentence structure: 'experience poor about science' is ungrammatical; use 'have much experience with' to express lack of experience. Suggestion: Say 'I don't have much experience with science.'

× I usually watched science development on TV.

✓ I usually watch science developments on TV.

Present tense usage: 'usually' requires present simple 'watch' for habitual actions, not past 'watched.' Suggestion: Use present simple with adverbs of frequency: 'I usually watch.'

× I because I didn't I don't smart and I usually interested interest en entertainment and.

✓ Because I'm not very smart in that area, I usually prefer entertainment.

Pronoun and sentence structure: Fragmented and incorrect pronoun/verb forms. Use 'I'm' for 'I am' and 'prefer' to express tendency. Remove duplicated words and fix 'interested in entertainment.' Suggestion: Simplify to a single clear sentence: 'Because I'm not very knowledgeable, I usually prefer entertainment.'

× I don't like science TV program but I sometimes I watched this program about AI or space.

✓ I don't usually like science TV programs, but sometimes I watch programs about AI or space.

Modal/auxiliary and tense: Use 'usually' and plural 'programs.' Habitual action uses present simple 'watch' not past 'watched.' Suggestion: 'I don't usually like science TV programs, but sometimes I watch...'.

× Space study especially AI is very curious things.

✓ Studies of space and especially AI are very interesting.

Incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and noun forms: 'curious things' is unnatural. Use 'interesting' to describe subjects and pluralize 'studies' and 'AI' as a field. Suggestion: Say 'Space studies, especially AI, are very interesting.'

× I don't know this question because I am Korean so I I don't know about Chinese culture but our country people visited or visited Science Museum especially when they were child they visited a science.

✓ I don't know about this because I am Korean, so I don't know much about Chinese culture. In my country, people visit science museums, especially when they are children.

Pronoun and sentence structure: Sentence is run-on and repetitive. Use 'I don't know about this' and 'people visit science museums' with correct plural 'children.' Suggestion: Break into two sentences and use correct plural forms and verb tense for general facts.