Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は直接的で短い点は良いですが、不自然な表現（"useful information and convenient"）や具体性の欠如、理由の説明が曖昧です。より自然な語彙を使い、1文目で立場を示し、2〜3文で具体的な理由や例をつなぎ語（because, so, for example）で補強してください。文は最大5文に収めてください。

例: Yes, I enjoy studying science because it helps me understand how things work. For example, I like learning about how everyday devices operate, which makes me feel more confident when fixing small problems at home.

提案: 時を示す導入は良いですが、"Honestly"などの語は口語的で不必要に聞こえることがあります。理由と結果を論理的に結びつけ、具体的な学習行動や変化（what you did to improve, outcomes）を付け加えると説得力が増します。

例: I began studying science in junior high school. At first I struggled, so I spent extra time reviewing experiments and doing practice problems, which helped my grades improve by the end of the year.

提案: 主題は示せていますが、'chemicals'や'liked experiences'は不自然な表現です。正しい語彙（chemistry, experiments）を使い、なぜ興味があるのかを具体的に説明してください。接続詞（because, so）で理由を明確に結び付けてください。

例: I was especially interested in chemistry because I enjoyed doing experiments in the lab. For example, mixing substances and observing reactions made the lessons exciting and helped me get high marks.

提案: 良い具体例がありますが、時制と語彙の誤り（play experiences → did experiments, build → built）を直し、文を自然な英語に整えてください。最初に要点を述べ、その後で具体例を述べ、接続語（for example, so）を使うと良いです。

例: I often did experiments in junior high school, and one memorable project was building a small robotic arm. For example, I used basic electronics and motors to make it move, which taught me practical skills in circuitry.

提案: 理由は述べていますが、'convenient'は番組に対して不自然です。具体性を高めて、どのような番組やどんな技術を学んだかを明示してください。また文法（learn it → learned from them）を直してください。

例: Yes, I enjoy watching science programs because they explain ideas clearly and give practical tips. For example, I learned cooking techniques from a science show that helped me control temperature better when preparing dinner.

提案: 一般化はできますが、'school career'は不自然な表現です。より自然な言い方（part of school trips）を使い、統計や個人的経験を織り交ぜて具体性を高めてください。

例: Yes, many people in China visit science museums because there are many museums and schools organize trips regularly. For example, when I was in junior high, our class went to a science museum as part of a school trip.

× Yes, I enjoy studying science because it is useful information and convenient.

✓ Yes, I enjoy studying science because it is useful and convenient.

The phrase 'useful information and convenient' improperly mixes a noun phrase with an adjective; 'science' here should be described by adjectives. Use 'useful and convenient' to modify 'studying science' clearly. Also 'information' is unnecessary and makes the sentence awkward. Suggestion: use parallel adjectives to describe an activity or thing.

× When I was a junior high school student, I started to study science.

✓ When I was a junior high school student, I started studying science.

After 'start' the -ing form is normally used to indicate beginning an activity. 'Started to study' is grammatical but less natural in this context; 'started studying' is more idiomatic. Keep past tense for consistency.

× Honestly, I was not good at science, so I studied it very hard.

✓ Honestly, I was not good at science, so I worked very hard at it.

The phrase 'studied it very hard' is understandable but awkward. Use 'worked hard at it' or 'studied very hard' without 'it'. Also maintain past tense. Suggestion: 'I worked very hard at it' sounds more natural.

× When I was at junior high school student, I was interested in chemicals because I got a high score and I liked experiences.

✓ When I was a junior high school student, I was interested in chemistry because I got high scores and I liked experiments.

Errors: missing article before 'junior high school student' and wrong preposition 'at'. 'Chemicals' (substances) is wrong; 'chemistry' (subject) is correct. 'A high score' should be plural 'high scores' if general, or 'a high score' with context. 'Experiences' should be 'experiments' for science practicals. Suggestions: include 'a' before 'junior high school student' and use correct noun forms.

× When I was a junior high school student, I often play experiences.

✓ When I was a junior high school student, I often did experiments.

Tense mismatch: 'was' is past, so follow with past 'did'. 'Play experiences' is unidiomatic; use 'do experiments' or 'conduct experiments'. Suggestion: use past tense and correct collocation: 'did experiments'.

× For example, I build a small robotic arm using basic electronics.

✓ For example, I built a small robotic arm using basic electronics.

Tense error: 'build' should be past 'built' to match 'When I was...'. Maintain past tense for completed actions. No adjective/adverb change needed beyond tense.

× I enjoy watching science TV programs because they are so helpful and convenient for me.

✓ I enjoy watching science TV programs because they are helpful and convenient for me.

'So' is informal and unnecessary; removing it makes the sentence more natural. 'Helpful and convenient' correctly modify 'programs'. Keep present simple for general preference.

× When I cook a dinner, I often use techniques from learning it.

✓ When I cook dinner, I often use techniques I learned from them.

'A dinner' is unnatural; 'cook dinner' is standard. 'Techniques from learning it' is ungrammatical: specify 'techniques I learned from them' ('them' refers to TV programs). Use past participle 'learned' to show acquisition.

× Yes, many Chinese people often visit science museums because there are a lot of them in China.

✓ Yes, many Chinese people often visit science museums because there are many of them in China.

'A lot of them' is informal; 'many of them' is more appropriate in this context. 'Many Chinese people often' is redundant but acceptable; consider removing 'often' or 'many' to avoid repetition: 'Yes, many Chinese people visit science museums.'

× For example, when I was a junior high school student, visiting them was a part of school career.

✓ For example, when I was a junior high school student, visiting them was part of school activities.

'A part of school career' is incorrect collocation. Use 'part of school activities' or 'part of the school curriculum' to express that visits were included in school programs. Also remove unnecessary article before 'part'.