Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并且条理清晰。开头给出明确的主题句，然后用1–2句简洁具体地说明原因和目标，避免重复和语法错误。可练习把复杂想法拆成短句并正确使用时态和词汇（例如 "help people's development" 应为 "help people" 或更具体的受益群体）。

例: Yes, I do. I plan to pursue science as my career because I find it fascinating and full of discovery. For example, I enjoy researching new technologies that can improve people’s health and livelihoods.

提案: 回答要更准确并修正措辞。直接给出时间点或年龄，然后说明具体的学习经历。避免重复短语（如 “how to do how to do”），并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I started learning about science when I was at primary school, so roughly twenty years ago. At that time we did simple experiments in class, which sparked my curiosity about how things work.

提案: 答案需要更清晰地表达具体学科并使用正确词汇（例如 “nature science” 或 “natural sciences”）。用一两句解释为什么感兴趣并举例说明如何放松或学到东西，避免口头语和人称错误（如 "he's"）。

例: I find natural sciences most interesting, especially ecology. It allows me to get close to nature, relax outdoors, and learn about ecosystems — for example, studying plant-animal interactions in a local reserve.

提案: 回答内容具体且有亮点，但需要语法和表达更准确。用一两句清楚描述项目目标和方法，使用正确的时态和单复数（"medicines"，"do not"）。可以补充一个具体成果或预期应用来增强说服力。

例: Currently I'm working on a project to discover new bio-based medicines derived from microorganisms. My aim is to identify non-toxic compounds that can protect crops and improve plant health in sustainable agriculture.

提案: 回答要更自然并避免矛盾（先说“不全部”，又说“从未看过”）。直接说喜欢或不喜欢，并说明具体原因和偏好。可提出替代方式（动手活动）并用连接词增强逻辑。

例: Not really — I rarely watch science TV programs because I find them a bit passive and boring. I prefer hands-on experiences, like lab visits or field trips, where I can try things myself.

提案: 回答需要更简洁并用更自然的表达来区分个人观点和普遍情况。先简短回答普遍状况（如果不确定可说明），然后给出个人感受并举例说明为什么不喜欢，避免语法错误（如 "it not have"）。

例: I'm not sure about everyone, but personally I don't visit science museums often. I find some exhibits too basic and geared towards children, so they don't inspire me or offer new insights.

× Yes, definitely. And This is why I choose this subject as my future work direction.

✓ Yes, definitely. This is why I chose this subject as my future career direction.

句子时态和句子结构问题：原句中“As my future work direction”用法不自然，且前句为过去的选择应使用过去时“chose”。建议用“career direction”或“career”更地道，且将动词改为过去式以与上下文一致。

× I think it's very interesting and for some interesting thing and I hope we can find some new things and to help people development.

✓ I think it's very interesting. For some interesting things, I hope we can discover new things that can help people's development.

句子结构混乱，缺少连贯性和正确的从句结构。原句中“for some interesting thing”不符合英语表达，应把句子拆分并用定语从句表目的或结果。中文建议：把句子简化并用从句连接，改为“希望能发现能帮助人们发展的新事物”。

× Well, I think it must have been about 20 years ago.

✓ Well, I think it was about 20 years ago.

过去时使用问题：使用“must have been”表示对过去的推测，但在谈论确切的时间点时更自然用简单过去时“was”。中文建议：直接说“约在20年前”。

× The main reason is that we have a science class in primary school and how to do how to do some simple experiment.

✓ The main reason is that we had a science class in primary school where we learned how to do some simple experiments.

句子结构和时态问题：对过去经历应使用过去时“had”，并且应使用定语从句“where we learned how to do…”来说明学到了什么。去掉重复的“how to do”。中文建议：用“在小学有科学课，我们学做一些简单的实验”。

× I guess it must be the nature size.

✓ I guess it must be nature-related subjects.

用词不当："nature size"不是正确短语。应使用“nature-related subjects”或“natural science”。中文建议：用“自然类科目”或“自然科学”。

× I think he's more interesting and umm will this time you can close to the nature and I think it's a good way to relax ourselves and at the same time we can learn some new things.

✓ I think it's more interesting, and this way you can get closer to nature. I think it's a good way to relax ourselves and at the same time learn new things.

人称和代词使用错误：原句用“he's”指代科目不合适，应使用“it's”。此外“close to the nature”应为“get closer to nature”。中文建议：将“he's”改为“it's”，并用“get closer to nature”。

× I guess it must be my project now and I try to find some new medicine which come from the microorganisms and it don't have any toxin and is very helpful for the plants and the crops.

✓ I guess it is my current project, and I am trying to find new medicines that come from microorganisms; they don't have any toxins and are very helpful for plants and crops.

时态、主谓一致和复数问题：应使用现在进行时“am trying”，复数形式“medicines/they”，以及主谓一致“don't have”改为“don't have”对应复数主语。去掉语法错误并拆分为更清晰的句子。中文建议：使用现在进行时，并保持主谓数一致，改为“我现在的项目是……我正在尝试寻找来自微生物的新药物，它们没有毒素，对植物和农作物很有帮助”。

× Frankly, not all. I never watched it.

✓ Frankly, not really. I have never watched them.

量词与代词使用问题："not all"不自然。若指电视节目（复数）应使用“them”，以及在现在完成时中使用“have never watched”更合适。中文建议：改为“说实话，不是很喜欢。我从没看过这些节目”。

× The main reason is that I feel it's a bit boring.

✓ The main reason is that I find them a bit boring.

句子指代不明确：应明确指代前文的“science TV programs”为复数“them”，并用“find”表示感受。中文建议：把“it”改为“them”，说“我觉得那些节目有点无聊”。

× I can't try it and just can't watch it and I really want to someone to take me to do this rather than just watch.

✓ I don't want to just watch them; I want someone to take me to do these activities instead.

代词和情态表达错误：原句中“can't try it”表意不清，且“want to someone to take me”语法错误。应使用“want someone to take me”或“I want to participate rather than just watch”。中文建议：改为“我不想只是看，我想有人带我去亲自参加”。

× Actually it's difficult to say, but personally I don't like do it.

✓ Actually it's difficult to say, but personally I don't like doing it.

动词+ing形式需要：动词“like”后应接动名词“doing”，不能直接接动词原形“do”。中文建议：把“don't like do it”改为“don't like doing it”。

× I think this museum is a bit boring and it not have enough thing to inspire my interesting and it's just some simple things for kids.

✓ I think this museum is a bit boring and it doesn't have enough exhibits to inspire my interest; it's just some simple things for kids.

形容词/名词和主谓一致错误："it not have"应为“it doesn't have”，"thing to inspire my interesting"应为“exhibits to inspire my interest”。使用“exhibit(s)”更恰当。中文建议：使用正确的动词形式“doesn't have”并把“interesting”改为名词“interest”，把“thing”改为“exhibits/展示”。