News— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接且语法准确。开头可以用一句主题句表明兴趣，然后简要说明原因并给出具体例子。避免句子结构混乱和词汇错误（如 "in vested" 应为 "invested"，"abstract the numbers" 可改为 "extract key figures"）。控制在不超过5句，并用连接词使逻辑更清晰。

例: Yes, I'm very interested in news, especially financial news. I prefer it because I have invested in the U.S. stock market and follow my portfolio closely. I usually extract key figures from reports and market updates to make trading decisions. This helps me react quickly when markets change.

提案: 回答需更简洁、语法正确并包含连接词说明顺序和原因。避免重复和语音性填充（如“they they”）。调整词汇（"earning costs" 应为 "earnings reports"），并提供具体渠道（如网站或 apps）。保持不超过5句。

例: Almost every morning I open my laptop and check global financial news and corporate earnings reports. I usually use financial websites and market apps to get updates. I do this because the information helps me decide which stocks to buy or sell that day.

提案: 回答总体清晰但有重复与语法问题。直接说不想当记者，然后用两到三个简短句子说明原因，避免泛化（"One would not like" 改为 "I wouldn't"）。改正词序和冠词（"a investor" → "an investor"）。用连接词比较两种工作的优缺点。

例: No, I wouldn't like to be a journalist. I'm an investor in the U.S. stock market and I enjoy the flexibility it gives me. Journalism, especially war reporting, seems dangerous and stressful, so it's not a career I would choose.

提案: 回答需更准确和连贯，避免口语填充（"MMM"），并改进语法和用词（如 "congression" 应为 "congress" 或更好 "congratulations" 不适合）。可先确认读过新闻，然后简洁描述事件并给出简短看法或影响。

例: Yes, I read the news this morning. I saw that the U.S. President visited China, which is positive for diplomatic relations. It could encourage more cooperation between the two countries and improve trade talks.

提案: 回答需要删除无意义的填充词（"uh", "umm"），并改进句子流畅度。直接陈述频率和话题，再说明原因并举例（如讨论股票策略或软件工具）。控制句子长度并使用连接词。

例: Yes, we talk about the news almost every day, but mainly financial news. We exchange trading strategies and discuss market movements, which helps us improve our trading systems and make better decisions.

× I'm so interested in news but I prefer financial news because I made my own portfolio in vested in U.S. stock market.

✓ I'm very interested in the news, but I prefer financial news because I made my own portfolio and invested in the U.S. stock market.

句中动词时态和形式混用（made my own portfolio in vested）不正确。应使用过去式 "invested" 表示已经完成的动作，并用连词 and 连接两个并列动作；此外 news 前通常加定冠词 the。建议：将复合动作按并列结构处理，并使用正确的过去式。

× I will abstract the numbers from the financial news and the financial data and I make D.

✓ I abstract numbers from financial news and financial data, and I make decisions.

原句中 will 与一般现在时和不完整的短语混用，且 'make D' 表达不完整且非标准。将总体习惯性动作用一般现在时，且将 D 展开为 decisions。建议：用一般现在时描述习惯性行为，并避免缩写或不明确的词。

× Almost every day when I get up I will open my laptop and glance the global financial news and corporate financial report and earning costs almost in every day morning.

✓ Almost every day when I get up, I open my laptop and glance at global financial news, corporate financial reports, and earnings costs every morning.

描述习惯性动作应使用一般现在时，而不是 will；动词 glance 需与介词 at 搭配；名词复数形式（reports）更合适；副词短语位置和词形需调整。建议：用一般现在时，检查动词搭配和名词单复数。

× I will do that because next I will they they the news will help me to make my today's.

✓ I do that because the news will help me make decisions for today.

原句结构混乱，有多余词（they they the）且语序不当；使用 'make my today's' 不自然且不完整。应简化为主从句结构：原因从句 + 将来用途。建议：删除多余词，重组从句，保持表达简洁。

× One would not like to be a journalist.

✓ I would not like to be a journalist.

上下文为第一人称陈述，使用 one 不符合说话人意图；应该用主语 I。建议：根据语境使用正确的人称代词。

× My job is a investor in the US stock market.

✓ My job is as an investor in the U.S. stock market.

冠词和名词搭配错误，'a investor' 应为 'an investor'，且更自然的结构为 'My job is as an investor' 或 'I am an investor'。建议：注意元音开头单词前使用 an，或改为更自然的句子结构。

× I think my job is free and casual.

✓ I think my job is flexible and casual.

用词不当：free 用于描述工作不合适，常用 flexible 描述工作灵活性。建议：选择更准确的形容词。

× I can work everywhere when I want.

✓ I can work anywhere I want.

everywhere 后接时间状语 'when I want' 语感不自然，anywhere 更适合。建议：用 anywhere + 主从句简洁表达。

× But the journalist, especially in the war journalist, I think it's very dangerous.

✓ But being a journalist, especially a war correspondent, I think is very dangerous.

表达冗余且词序不当，'in the war journalist' 应为 'a war correspondent' 或 'a war journalist'，并且需用动名词结构 'being a journalist'。建议：用正确名词短语并调整句子结构。

× Yes, I have read news this morning.

✓ Yes, I read the news this morning.

与具体时间短语 'this morning' 连用时应使用一般过去时而不是现在完成时。并且 news 前加定冠词 the 更自然。建议：具体过去时间使用过去时。

× This morning U.S. President visited China.

✓ This morning the U.S. President visited China.

缺少定冠词 the，用以特指。建议：在特指职位前加 the。

× What's a cheerful news for the 2 great countries?

✓ What cheerful news for the two great countries!

news 为不可数名词，不使用不定冠词 a；数字书写应为 two；感叹句更自然。建议：不可数名词前不要用 a，调换为感叹句形式。

× Also for congression to Chinese and the US.

✓ Also, it is good for the relationship between China and the U.S.

'congression to Chinese and the US' 用法错误且不清晰，应表达两国关系或国会相关的益处。建议：用 relationship between 或 similar 明确表达。

× MMM people, they will work together and then make the greater again.

✓ Many people will work together and then make things better again.

'MMM' 非标准；'make the greater again' 语法与搭配错误，意图应为 'make things better' 或 'make the relationship greater'。建议：用 clear 的词语替换非标准片段并使用正确搭配。

× Yes, we discuss and the chat with each other about the news almost every day.

✓ Yes, we discuss and chat with each other about the news almost every day.

多余定冠词 'the' 放在 chat 前不必要，应为动词并列 'discuss and chat'。建议：并列动词不需要额外定冠词。

× But uh, we only talk about the financial news because we, we are exchanging the trading strategy and the umm trading system together.

✓ But we only talk about financial news because we exchange trading strategies and trading systems with each other.

习惯性动作用一般现在时；名词复数（strategies）更自然；'exchange ... with each other' 为正确搭配。建议：使用复数形式和正确的介词搭配。

× So the financials are important.

✓ So financial news is important.

financials 常指财务报表，不等同于 financial news；主语与谓语需保持一致（news 为不可数，用 is）。建议：用更精确的名词并注意主谓一致。