Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子表达不够清晰，语法和用词错误多，回答冗长且逻辑混乱。建议：1) 先用一句简洁的主题句直接回答（如“I’m not good at remembering numbers.”）。2) 用1–2个简短的支持句说明原因或举例，注意时态和代词用法（例如用“their phone numbers”而非“there”），避免无关或重复信息。3) 使用连接词如“for example”和“so”来增强连贯性。练习时可把复合句拆成短句，注意发音和句子完整性。

例: No, I’m not good at remembering numbers. For example, my parents often ask me to remember their phone numbers, but I usually forget them quickly. Because of that, I have to write the numbers down or save them in my phone.

提案: 内容表达模糊且有语法错误，逻辑不连贯。建议：1) 先直接回答“Yes”或“No”。2) 用一两句简明说明理由，使用恰当的学科名称（例如“data analytics”或“decision analytics”）。3) 避免不必要的重复，使用连接词如“because”或“so”。4) 关注词序和词形（e.g. “postgraduate program”，“data analytics”）。

例: Yes, I will. I am applying for a postgraduate program in data analytics, so I will work with numbers a lot. Because the field involves statistical analysis and data modeling, numbers will be essential in my future work.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和重复，表达不自然。建议：1) 用正确词汇（不是“mess”，应为“math”或“maths”）并避免重复词。2) 先给出主题句（e.g. “Yes, I enjoyed it.”），然后用一两句具体原因支持，如喜爱数字、老师教得好或参加过有趣活动。3) 使用连接词如“because”或“and”使句子更顺畅。

例: Yes, I enjoyed studying math as a child. I was curious about numbers and patterns, and my primary school math teacher made lessons very interesting, which encouraged me to learn more.

提案: 回答比较清楚但有小语法错误和重复。建议：1) 直接指出具体数字类型（e.g. birthdays，anniversaries）。2) 用一两句说明为什么重要并举例具体做法，注意主谓一致（“the numbers are”而非“is”）。3) 使用连接词如“because”或“so”增强逻辑性，并避免重复短语。

例: The most important numbers to me are my parents’ and my boyfriend’s birthdays. These dates matter because they remind me to prepare gifts and celebrate with them, so I always mark them on my calendar.

× For example my parents let me reminding their phone numbers but I can't remember there clearly is pay spent my much time to do it.

✓ For example, my parents let me memorize their phone numbers, but I can't remember them clearly; I have to spend a lot of time doing it.

句中有多处代词和动词使用错误："let me reminding" 应为动词不定式或原形动词，如 "let me memorize"；"their phone numbers" 的宾语之后代词不应为 "there" 而应为指代电话号的宾格 "them"；"is pay spent my much time" 语序和词形均错误，正确表达为 "I have to spend a lot of time doing it"。建议注意代词人称和格（主格/宾格），以及常见动词搭配（let + 宾语 + 原形动词），并练习固定表达。

× Actually I think yes because I am applying for the post graduate program.

✓ Actually, I think so because I am applying for a postgraduate program.

这里用词和时态搭配问题："think yes" 不自然，应用 "think so"；"post graduate" 更常写为合成词 "postgraduate"。句子时态为现在进行表示正在申请，符合语境。建议在表达同意时用自然短语（like "I think so"），并注意词的正确拼写与空格。

× The major is data decision and analytics.

✓ The major is Decision Science and Analytics.

原句结构和专业名称不自然。"data decision and analytics" 不是常见表述，应改为更合适的专业名称，如 "Decision Science and Analytics" 或 "Data Decision-making and Analytics"。建议了解并使用目标专业的标准英文名称，确保语义清晰。

× Though the data is very important for this measure is about lost numbers and data.

✓ The data is very important, and this program is about data and numbers.

句子结构混乱且逻辑不清：使用 "Though" 导致转折不当，且 "this measure is about lost numbers" 含义不明。按照语境，应直接说明课程内容与数据相关。建议简化句子，保持主谓一致并明确意思。

× So I think I will use.

✓ So I think I will use numbers in my work.

原句缺少宾语，导致不完整（属于无动词或句子结构错误）。这里需要补全宾语，明确所指为 "numbers"。建议说完整句子，确保动词有明确的宾语或补语。

× Yes, I really love mess.

✓ Yes, I really loved math.

原句用词错误："mess" 与语境不符，应该是 "math"（数学）。同时时态若指过去喜欢，应使用过去式 "loved"，与后文 "when I was a child" 一致。建议确认单词拼写并与时间状语保持时态一致。

× I think I I was very sensitive to numbers when I was a child and that's another reason is I really love my math teacher in my primary school.

✓ I think I was very good with numbers when I was a child, and another reason is that I really loved my math teacher in primary school.

句中有重复词（"I I"）、搭配不当（"sensitive to numbers" 不自然，应为 "good with numbers" 或 "sensitive to numbers" 可指敏感但更自然表述为 "good with numbers"）、连接词和从句结构错误（"that's another reason is" 应为 "another reason is that"）、时态不一致（childhood 用过去时）。建议删除重复词，使用自然搭配，并调整从句引导词和时态一致。

× I think it's my parents and my boyfriend's birthday.

✓ I think it's my parents' and my boyfriend's birthdays.

原句的所有格和单复数使用不准确：若指父母两人的生日，应使用复数 "birthdays" 或若指父母共有同一天生日，应写 "my parents' birthday"（注意所有格撇号位置）；此外父母的所有格应为 "parents'" 而非 "parents"。建议根据实际含义选择单数或复数形式，并正确使用所有格撇号。

× I think the numbers is very important to me.

✓ I think the numbers are very important to me.

主谓一致错误："numbers" 为复数名词，应搭配复数动词 "are" 而非单数 "is"。建议检查主语单复数并使谓语动词一致。

× On that day I will buy some gift for them and celebrate with them.

✓ On those days I will buy some gifts for them and celebrate with them.

量词和指示词使用不当：如果指多个生日，应使用复数指示词 "those days" 和复数可数名词 "gifts"；若只指同一天（父母和男友在同一天生日）则需改为 "On that day I will buy gifts for them" 并根据情况调整。建议根据实际情况确认单复数并调整指示词与名词的一致性。