Number— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then briefly explain why with specific details and linking words. Avoid contradictions (you said both 'not quite' and 'I'm good'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and correct basic grammar (e.g., "short-term memory").

例: Not really. I find remembering numbers difficult because I have ADHD, which affects my short-term memory. However, I think I could improve if I practiced memory techniques such as repetition or using phone notes.

提案: Answer directly and organize with linking words: state clearly that you will use numbers, then give specific areas where numbers are needed and a brief reason. Fix word order and use concise phrases rather than long lists.

例: Yes, I will. I am studying business administration with international relations, so I will use numbers in areas such as accounting, marketing analysis, and budgeting because they are essential for decision-making and reporting.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatical response: begin with a topic sentence saying whether you enjoyed it, then give specific reasons and one example using linking words. Avoid irrelevant or unclear words (e.g., "MAD", "adaching", "lung problems") and correct tense and agreement.

例: Not really. I found math difficult as a child because I had trouble concentrating, so calculations often confused me. As a result, I preferred visual subjects like art, where my visual memory helped me learn better.

提案: Be concise and structured: state the main types of numbers, then give a specific reason for each using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "family members' phone numbers") and avoid repeating similar ideas.

例: Important numbers for me include my credit card and bank details for online purchases, my family members' phone numbers for quick contact, and my national ID number for official procedures and identification.

× Not quite, I'm good at remembering numbers because I have ADHD so it's too hard for me to remember.

✓ Not really; I'm not good at remembering numbers because I have ADHD, so it's too hard for me to remember them.

The original sentence uses contradictory conjunctions and incorrect logical connectors. 'Not quite' followed by 'I'm good at' conflicts with the intended meaning. Use 'Not really' and explicitly state the negative: 'I'm not good at remembering numbers.' Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses and use 'them' as the pronoun for 'numbers.' Suggestion: keep clausal connectors clear and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× Like my short short memories.

✓ I have a very short memory.

The phrase 'short short memories' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use the noun phrase 'a very short memory' or 'short-term memory.' Avoid repeating adjectives; adjust article and singular/plural to fit meaning.

× Very bad.

✓ It's very bad.

This fragment lacks a verb and subject. Adding 'It's' completes the sentence: 'It's very bad.' Fragments should be connected to a main clause or made complete with subject and verb.

× And if I practice on it maybe I can.

✓ And if I practice, maybe I can improve.

The verb phrase 'practice on it' is informal and incomplete. Use 'practice' with object omitted or 'practice it.' Also include the result verb 'improve' to complete the idea. Comma after the conditional clause clarifies structure.

× I believe definitely I need them because I'm studying currently business administration with international relations and it's important in business also in marketing accounting to use numbers.

✓ I definitely believe I need them because I'm currently studying business administration with international relations, and it's important to use numbers in business, marketing, and accounting.

Word order and modal emphasis are awkward. Place 'definitely' before the verb it modifies. 'Currently' should come before 'studying.' List items need commas and parallel structure: 'in business, marketing, and accounting.' Use 'to use numbers' for clarity.

× Not really. I struggle with MAD as a child because I have adaching found concentrating on numbers and calculations difficult.

✓ Not really. I struggled with math as a child because I found concentrating on numbers and calculations difficult.

Tense inconsistency: 'struggle' (present) vs 'as a child' requires past tense 'struggled.' 'MAD' appears to be a typo for 'math,' and 'adaching' is incorrect and likely stray text. Use 'found' for past perception. Ensure correct spelling and past tense for childhood statements.

× For example, I often got confused with lung problems and prefers subjects that were more visual.

✓ For example, I often got confused with long problems and preferred subjects that were more visual.

Several issues: 'lung' is likely a typo for 'long' or better 'abstract' — context suggests 'long problems' is odd; more likely 'word problems' or 'algebraic problems.' Also maintain past tense 'preferred' to match 'got confused.' 'Prefers' is third person singular present and wrong for 'I.' Suggest replacing 'lung' with correct word; here changed to 'long' but consider 'word' or 'abstract.'

× My visual memory is quite a lot.

✓ My visual memory is quite good.

'Quite a lot' modifies quantity, not ability. Use adjective 'good' to describe 'memory.' Keep adjective agreement appropriate for the noun.

× My credit card and other bank details are important because I need them to buy things online securely.

✓ My credit card details and other bank details are important because I need them to buy things online securely.

Original mixes singular 'credit card' and plural 'details.' It's clearer to specify 'credit card details.' Ensure noun forms match the intended meaning and pronouns ('them') refer to plural 'details.'

× I also keep my family members phone numbers and to contact them quickly, and my national ID number is essential for official procedures like this.

✓ I also keep my family members' phone numbers to contact them quickly, and my national ID number is essential for official procedures like this.

Missing possessive apostrophe in 'family members' and unnecessary infinitive 'and to contact.' Use 'family members' phone numbers' -> 'family members' phone numbers' (possessive). Remove extra conjunction and ensure parallel structure. 'Like this' is acceptable but ensure clarity.