Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and articles), clarity and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. However, I used a bicycle sometimes to go to nearby places such as the Gurdwara and my friend’s house, because it was convenient and cheap.

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Use clear linking words and better vocabulary (e.g., "afford", "inexpensive", "widely used"). Provide one specific reason and a brief example or comparison. Use correct sentence structure and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, motorcycles and scooters are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars. For example, a scooter is much cheaper to buy and run, so families often choose bikes for daily commuting.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was child, but I have a bicycle and a bicycle.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I had a bicycle.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was child'. Use past simple 'didn't have'. Also 'when I was child' needs the article 'a'. The phrase 'I have a bicycle and a bicycle' is repetitive; likely intended 'I had a bicycle.' Use consistent past tense for past habits or possessions. Suggestion: Use past simple for past situations and include articles: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child, but I had a bicycle.'

× I used to I was using to when I go to any place like Gurdwara or other places.

✓ I used to go to places like the Gurdwara.

The original mixes 'used to' with 'I was using to' and uses present 'go' instead of past habitual form. 'Used to' plus base verb expresses past habits: 'used to go'. Also 'Gurdwara' as a specific place should take the definite article 'the' when referring to a known type/place. Remove redundant 'or other places' or include 'and other places' for clarity. Suggestion: Say 'I used to go to places like the Gurdwara.' or 'I used to go to the Gurdwara and other places.'

× Yes, bikes are too popular in my country because in my country people people are not too much richer, therefore they cannot afford the cars.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because people are not very rich, so they cannot afford cars.

The sentence repeats 'people'. 'Too popular' suggests excessive popularity; 'very popular' is more natural. 'Not too much richer' is ungrammatical; use 'not very rich'. Article 'the' before 'cars' is unnecessary when speaking generally: use 'cars'. Replace 'therefore' with 'so' for simpler spoken style. Maintain present simple for general truths. Suggestion: 'Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because people are not very rich, so they cannot afford cars.'

× So they prefer to buy the bikes because in my country bikes are not expensive as compared with other vehicles.

✓ So they prefer to buy bikes because bikes in my country are less expensive than other vehicles.

The phrase 'buy the bikes' uses an unnecessary definite article; use 'buy bikes' for general statement. 'Not expensive as compared with' is awkward; use comparative structure 'less expensive than'. Keep consistent present simple for general statements. Suggestion: 'So they prefer to buy bikes because bikes in my country are less expensive than other vehicles.'