Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est courte et contient une erreur logique (« when I was tired »). Donnez une phrase thématique claire puis ajoutez un détail précis et pertinent. Utilisez des mots de liaison simples si vous ajoutez une raison ou un souvenir. Travaillez aussi la précision du vocabulaire (par exemple « as a child », « when I was about X years old »).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was about eight years old, and I used to ride it every evening around the neighbourhood. For example, I often practised cycling with my older brother until I felt confident riding on the road.

提案: La réponse est confuse et contient des contradictions (« Absolutely. I think not. ») et des erreurs grammaticales. Répondez directement, puis donnez des détails concrets et cohérents en utilisant des connecteurs (for example, because, therefore). Corrigez la grammaire (use of articles, plural forms, verb tenses) et remplacez les formulations ambiguës par des expressions claires comme « most children », « on my way to work », « I see many children ».

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable way to travel. For example, many children and students cycle to school, and I see dozens of kids riding bikes on my way to work each morning, which shows how common cycling is.

× I had a bike when I was tired.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'tired' (an adjective describing physical state) instead of 'child' (a noun indicating age). This is not a tense error but a word choice error that makes the sentence illogical in context. Replace 'tired' with 'a child' to correctly answer the Examiner's question about childhood possession. Suggestion: Pay attention to the question context and choose vocabulary that matches age/time (e.g., 'when I was a child', 'when I was young').

× I think not.

✓ I don't think so.

The phrase 'I think not' is unnatural in conversational English here. The student intended to disagree with the idea that bikes are popular. Use the present simple negative 'I don't think so' to express this opinion. Suggestion: Use common conversational negatives like 'I don't think so' for clarity.

× But I'm very popular in my country because most of kids are using it to try to have transport on their way.

✓ But bicycles are very popular in my country because most kids use them to get to places.

Multiple issues: 'I'm very popular' wrongly refers to the speaker instead of bikes; 'most of kids' should be 'most kids' (quantifier + noun); 'are using it' wrong pronoun and continuous form—use simple present 'use' for habitual actions; 'to try to have transport on their way' is unnatural. The corrected sentence uses proper quantifier, noun agreement, pronoun, and tense. Suggestion: Match quantifiers with nouns ('most kids', 'many people'), use simple present for habits ('use'), and ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents ('them' for bicycles).

× And I think that I saw many kids in front of my environment every morning when I'm going up to my job.

✓ I also see many kids in front of my house every morning when I go to work.

The original mixes past ('I saw') and present progressive ('I'm going') incorrectly. The speaker describes a habitual action, so use simple present ('see', 'go'). 'In front of my environment' is incorrect phrasing; 'in front of my house' or 'in my neighborhood' is better. 'Go to work' is the common expression, not 'go up to my job'. Suggestion: For habitual routines, use simple present tense and natural collocations ('go to work', 'in front of my house', 'in my neighborhood').