Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer does not address the past tense of the question and is too short and off-topic. Use a clear topic sentence in past tense, add one or two supporting details, and keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words if adding details (for example: because, so, but).

例: No, I did not have a bike when I was a child. I lived in a crowded city, so my parents preferred to walk or use public transport with me. However, I often borrowed my friend’s bike to ride in the park on weekends.

提案: The answer is unclear and uses incorrect words. Start with a direct opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples. Keep sentences coherent and use linking words like because, for example, or however. Avoid unrelated words and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in my country, especially in smaller towns and among students. For example, many people use bicycles to commute short distances because they are cheap and convenient. However, in big cities motorcycles and cars are more common due to longer travel distances.

× No, I have a mobile.

✓ No, I had a mobile.

The examiner asked about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so the student must use past tense. Using present tense 'have' is incorrect for a past-time question. Suggestion: use past simple 'had' to match the time frame ('I had a mobile').

× How many bytes are really expensive?

✓ How many bikes are really expensive?

The student likely meant 'bikes' but used the homophone 'bytes', creating a vocabulary error and making the sentence nonsensical. Also the question 'How many bikes are really expensive?' asks for a number which may not be appropriate; better alternatives: 'Are bikes really expensive?' or 'How expensive are bikes?' Suggestion: choose correct noun 'bikes' and adjust question form to 'Are bikes really expensive?' or 'How expensive are bikes?' depending on intended meaning.

× And umm, other countries can do other countries which expensive bikes?

✓ And can people in other countries buy more expensive bikes?

This original sentence has multiple structural and word-choice errors: incorrect word order, unclear subject, and missing auxiliary verb. It seems the student intended to ask whether other countries have or buy more expensive bikes. Correction uses appropriate auxiliary 'can' at the start for a question, clear subject 'people in other countries', and correct adjective placement 'more expensive'. Suggestion: form yes/no questions with auxiliary + subject + verb ('Can people...') or use 'Do other countries have more expensive bikes?').