Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and stay on topic. Start with a clear topical sentence (past simple) and then give one or two relevant supporting details. Avoid unrelated or confusing information. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., “and,” “so,” “because”). Keep it natural and concise (no more than 4–5 short sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my 10th birthday because I had been saving money for a while. I used it to visit friends and ride around the neighborhood every day, so it was an important part of my childhood.

提案: Make your answer more grammatical and more specific. Begin with a clear opinion, then add 1–2 specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “also”). Use correct collocations (ride a bike, commute by bike) and keep sentences concise. Avoid repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short journeys. For example, many people commute to work or school by bike, and others use them for quick trips to the market. As a result, cycling is a common sight in both cities and small towns.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present simple 'have' with the past time reference 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the past context, and include the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events and include articles where needed.

× My mother left me on my 15th birthday when I got my good marks in my class.

✓ My mother left me on my 15th birthday when I got good marks in my class.

The phrase 'my good marks' is unnatural; omit 'my' before 'good marks' or say 'my grades' if personal possession is intended. Also sentence tense is past which is correct. Suggestion: say 'I got good marks' or 'I got good grades'.

× Yes, of course bikes are popular in my country most of the even most of the people ride from work to home through bike.

✓ Yes, of course bikes are popular in my country; many people even ride them from work to home.

The original mixes phrases and has awkward structure. Use 'many people' instead of 'most of the' unless you mean majority, and 'ride them' refers back to 'bikes'. 'Through bike' is incorrect preposition and noun usage; use 'by bike' or 'from work to home' changed to 'from work to home' or better 'to commute to and from work'. Suggestion: use concise structure and correct prepositions ('by bike').

× Apart from this, bikes are used for even short trips.

✓ Apart from this, bikes are even used for short trips.

Word order is awkward: 'even' should modify 'used' or 'short trips'. Place 'even' before 'used' or before 'short' to clarify meaning. Also keep consistent order: 'used for short trips' is correct. Suggestion: 'Bikes are even used for short trips' or 'Bikes are used even for short trips'.