Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (past tense and subject-verb agreement), remove repetition, and make the answer concise with one clear topic sentence followed by a specific supporting detail. Use past tense consistently and avoid repeating words. Add a linking word if you give an extra detail (e.g., “and” or “so”).

例: Yes, I did. When I was seven, my mother took me to a department store and let me choose a bike I liked, so I picked a bright red one that I rode almost every day.

提案: Make the response more specific and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because,” “therefore,” “for example”). Correct minor phrasing (e.g., “there is no MRT” and “people usually rent bikes”).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my city because there is no MRT, so many people rent bikes for short trips. For example, students and office workers often cycle to the market or nearby offices to save time and money.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'have' (present) is inconsistent. Change to 'had' to match past context. Suggestion: Use past simple for states in the past: 'I had a bike.'

× When I was seven years old, my mom bring me to the department store and let me let me choose one bike that I like.

✓ When I was seven years old, my mom brought me to the department store and let me choose a bike that I liked.

There are multiple past-tense errors: 'bring' should be past 'brought' (verb tense), and 'let me let me' duplicates a phrase. Also 'choose' should remain base form after 'let' but the time frame requires 'liked' to match past. Change 'one bike' to 'a bike' for natural article usage. Suggestions: Use past simple for completed actions ('brought'); after 'let' use base verb ('let me choose'); maintain past reference for descriptions ('liked').

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially for my city because in my city there's no MRT so people usually rent bike to go anywhere they want to go.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country, especially in my city because there isn't an MRT, so people usually rent bikes to go wherever they want.

Several issues: 'especially for my city' is incorrect preposition use — use 'in my city' (preposition error). 'there's no MRT' is better expressed as 'there isn't an MRT' (there be and article); 'rent bike' needs plural 'bikes' (singular/plural issue). 'anywhere they want to go' is wordy; 'wherever they want' is more natural. Suggestions: Use 'in' for locations; use correct 'there is/there are' with articles; match plural nouns with plural agreement; simplify phrasing for fluency.