Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar errors (e.g., "brought" → "bought" if intended, remove duplicate phrase "but now that"). Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. My mother bought it for me when I was about 12, and I rode it every day around the neighborhood. However, now that I’m older I ride a motorcycle for longer trips.

提案: Make your opinion clear and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words (e.g., "however", "because", "for example") and correct grammar ("adults need", "when they are kids"). Add a specific reason or brief example to support your view.

例: Bikes are fairly popular, especially among children. However, adults usually prefer motorcycles for commuting because they are faster and more practical for long distances. For example, many workers ride motorcycles to get to work each day.

× Actually, I used to own a bike when I was a child.

✓ I used to own a bike when I was a child.

This sentence is already correct in past habitual meaning; no change is needed. Keep 'used to' for past habits.

× My mother brought me that bike when I was around 12 years old and I used to ride it all the time when I was a kid.

✓ My mother bought me that bike when I was around 12 years old, and I rode it all the time when I was a kid.

Use 'bought' rather than 'brought' to indicate purchasing. After a specific past time reference, simple past ('rode') is more natural than 'used to ride'. Combine clauses with a comma and 'and' for clarity.

× But now that I but now that I am older, I am riding a motorcycle instead.

✓ But now that I am older, I ride a motorcycle instead.

The original repeats 'but now that' and mixes progressive 'am riding' with general present state. Remove duplication and use simple present 'ride' to describe a regular or current state.

× I think bikes are popular in my country, but it's more popular for kids to ride bike instead of an adult because an adult need to get themselves a motorcycle so that they can travel long distances to their workplace.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country, but they are more popular among kids than among adults because adults need to get motorcycles so that they can travel long distances to their workplaces.

Problems: mismatch of singular/plural pronouns and verbs ('it's' vs 'they are'), use of 'ride bike' missing article/ plural, subject-verb agreement ('adult need' should be 'adults need'), and awkward reflexive 'themselves' unnecessary. Use plural forms consistently and compare groups correctly.

× And bikes are popular in my country only when they were a kid.

✓ And bikes are popular in my country only for kids.

The clause 'when they were a kid' incorrectly mixes plural 'they' with singular 'a kid' and uses past tense 'were' incorrectly. Use present general statement 'for kids' to match the rest of the response.