Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense and clear vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two brief supporting details (where, who with, or why you didn’t). Use past tense for childhood and avoid filler words. Link ideas with simple connectors if needed.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school with my friends. As a result, I missed out on learning to ride until I was a teenager.

提案: Answer the question directly, use clear comparative language and correct word choice. Begin with a topic sentence stating your opinion, then give a specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" or "however" to connect ideas.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in my country because most people prefer motorbikes and cars for commuting. For example, in cities there are few bike lanes, so cycling is seen as unsafe.

× No I have no vibe when I'm I'm child child cause umm I I don't know how to write it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

This sentence has multiple problems: incorrect vocabulary ('vibe' should be 'bike'), incorrect tense and form for past experience (use past simple 'didn't have'), repeated words and fillers, and incorrect pronoun and verb forms ('I'm child' should be 'I was a child'). Use clear, concise wording and the past simple to describe past possession. Suggestion: remove fillers and repetitions and use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' Grammar problem type ID: 26

× No bikes are less popular than why are in my country.

✓ No, bikes are less popular than cars in my country.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice and structure: 'why are' is meaningless here. It appears the student intended to compare bikes with another mode (likely 'cars'). Use a clear comparative structure: 'X are less popular than Y.' Ensure the compared noun is correct and in the plural form to match the subject. If the intended comparison was with walking or public transport, replace 'cars' accordingly. Grammar problem type ID: 1