Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and tense accuracy, give a direct topic sentence, and add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases (e.g. “PIE”). Use past tense when talking about childhood. Keep it under 5 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school or took the bus because my family lived fairly close to local shops. Also, I preferred indoor activities like reading, so I never asked my parents for one.

提案: Make a clear opinion statement, then support it with specific reasons and linking words. Use correct nouns and verb forms, and organize ideas coherently. Limit to 3–4 sentences and avoid vague words like “news” or repeated phrases.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people use bicycles for short trips or commuting in small towns because they are cheap and convenient. In addition, young people often ride bikes for leisure and to meet friends in parks.

× No, I don't have a bike and it's sad because I'm not interested for PIE.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike, and it was sad because I wasn't interested in PE.

The question asks about childhood, so past tense should be used (didn't have, was sad, wasn't interested). Use 'interested in' not 'interested for'. 'PE' (physical education) is likely intended instead of 'PIE'. Ensure verb tense consistency and correct preposition use.

× So I don't like, I don't like and I don't receive any types of PIE.

✓ So I didn't like it, and I didn't take any PE classes.

This refers to the past (childhood), so use past tense (didn't like, didn't take). 'Receive any types of PE' is unnatural; use 'take PE classes'. Also combine repeated 'I don't like' into one clear clause and ensure verb choice is appropriate.

× News I think about is popular in my country because there are many peoples right transport and their hometown and many another place visit and fun with their friends spend time lot of lot of time.

✓ I think bicycles are popular in my country because many people use them for transport, visiting their hometowns, and having fun with friends; they spend a lot of time riding them.

Sentence is fragmented and unclear. Correct subject ('people' not 'peoples'), verb choices ('use them for transport'), plural and article issues, and word order ('a lot of time'). Rephrase to clear clauses connected logically. Use simple present for general facts ('are popular','use','spend').