Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 시제 오류를 바로잡아야 합니다. 질문에는 과거 시제로 짧고 직접적으로 답한 뒤(예: Yes, I did.) 그 다음에 필요하면 간단한 세부 정보를 추가하세요. 또한 어휘 선택과 발음 불명확성을 고쳐야 합니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 논리적으로 이어주고, 중복과 불필요한 말(uh, um)을 줄이세요. 구체적으로는: 1) 주된 답변을 먼저 말하기(주어+과거동사). 2) 그 다음에 소유 및 출처(‘it was second-hand/bought from a second-hand shop’)와 느낌(‘I loved it because…’)을 한두 문장으로 덧붙이기. 3) 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하기.

例: Yes, I did. I had an old bicycle that my parents bought from a second-hand shop. I loved it because it was sturdy and I rode it everywhere around the neighborhood.

提案: 응답을 더 명확하고 구조적으로 말해야 합니다. 먼저 직접적인 주제문으로 시작하고(예: Yes, I think so.), 이유를 1~2가지 구체적으로 제시하세요(예: transportation, exercise, proximity to parks). 불필요한 반복과 모호한 표현(‘Hollywood nearby the Hollywood’)을 피하고, 연결어(for example, because, also)를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어주세요. 또한 시제와 관사 사용을 확인하고 발음/유창성을 향상시키기 위해 말하기 속도를 조절하세요.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people learn to ride when they are children because it’s an inexpensive way to get around, and people also enjoy cycling for exercise and leisure.

× Yes, I have a bucket when I was tired that is very amazing. Umm bike because, uh, it was by berthed by the second hand shop. It was not the not the failure point, it was our.

✓ Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was bought from a secondhand shop and it was very special to us.

Original sentences have multiple structural problems: mixed tenses ('have' with 'was') and confusing fragments. Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child.' Combine fragments into clear sentences: state possession in past, then describe origin using passive 'was bought' or active 'we bought it.' Remove unclear phrases like 'berthe d' and 'failure point.' Suggestion: keep one idea per sentence and match tense consistently. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Yes, definitely uh, all, most people are learning the way how to ride a bike when I, when I, we are child and also we have a Hollywood, you know, nearby the Hollywood, so a lot of people like the bike usually.

✓ Yes, definitely. Most people learned how to ride a bike when they were children. We also have a park nearby, so many people usually like riding bikes.

Original uses present progressive 'are learning' and present 'are child' which conflict with intended past meaning. Change to simple past 'learned' and past 'were children.' 'We have a Hollywood' is likely incorrect noun choice; replace with 'a park' or appropriate place. Use 'riding bikes' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: choose correct tense for completed actions and use accurate nouns; keep pronouns consistent (they/them for people). Grammar problem type ID:5