Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and prepositions, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep it under five sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I preferred playing video games indoors, so I rarely took part in outdoor activities. Because of that, my parents didn’t see the need to buy a bike for me.

提案: Make the answer more structured and precise. Start with a direct opinion, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'also'), and avoid vague phrases like 'so I think yeah.' Use clearer comparisons and correct article use.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in the Philippines. They are cheaper to buy and maintain than using public transport, and many people cycle for short trips to save money. Also, bicycles are practical in congested areas where cars and buses are slow.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was more interested on playing video games and I don't want to spend my time doing physical activities, so I mostly stayed indoors.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because I was more interested in playing video games and I didn't want to spend my time doing physical activities, so I mostly stayed indoors.

Two issues fall under the 'Verb + -ing form' and preposition use: the correct preposition after 'interested' is 'in', not 'on'. Also the clause 'I don't want' is inconsistent with the past reference 'when I was a child' and should be in the past tense 'I didn't want'. Use of '-ing' in 'playing' and 'doing' is correct. Suggestion: use 'interested in' and match verb tenses to the time frame (past), e.g., 'I was more interested in playing... and I didn't want to...'.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it is a lot more affordable rather than taking public transportation, which might cost a lot to ordinary Filipinos since the minimum wage here in the Philippines for jobs is very low. So I think yeah.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are much more affordable than taking public transportation, which can be expensive for ordinary Filipinos since wages in the Philippines are relatively low.

Preposition and comparison errors: use 'than' not 'rather than' when making a direct comparison of affordability. Also 'it' should be 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'bikes' (subject-verb/ pronoun agreement). 'A lot more affordable' is colloquial; 'much more affordable' is clearer. 'Might cost a lot to' is awkward; use 'can be expensive for'. Suggestion: use 'than' for comparisons, match pronouns to noun number, and choose clearer phrasing like 'they are much more affordable than taking public transportation'.