Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Grammar and tense are incorrect and the response is too short and lacks detail. Start with a clear topic sentence using the past tense, then add one or two supporting details (where you rode it, how you felt, or who taught you). Keep it natural and no more than five sentences. Use a linking word if you add extra information.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon, and my father taught me how to balance it. As a result, I felt very independent and enjoyed cycling with my friends on weekends.

提案: The answer is unclear, grammatically incorrect and contains confusing phrasing. Begin with a direct opinion, then add specific reasons and a linking word to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'also'). Mention concrete benefits (transport, exercise, cost-saving) and keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an inexpensive and convenient way to travel short distances. In addition, cycling is good exercise and helps reduce traffic and fuel consumption in busy cities.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'had' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for completed past situations (I had a bike).

× Yes, by the way, popular in our country because it helps us to.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country because they are useful.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb phrase ('popular' is an adjective but no verb) and ends with an incomplete clause 'helps us to.' The corrected sentence adds the subject 'bikes' and verb 'are' and completes the thought with 'useful.' Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and a main verb and finish the intended clause (e.g., 'because they are useful' or 'because they help us commute').

× It's a skill that usually also happens to consume energy and gas.

✓ They help reduce the consumption of energy and gas.

Pronoun and subject reference are incorrect: 'It's a skill' does not refer to 'bikes' and is singular; 'happens to consume' is awkward and opposite in meaning. The corrected sentence refers back to 'bikes' with 'They' (plural) and uses a clear verb phrase 'help reduce the consumption of.' Suggestion: keep pronoun number consistent with the noun and choose verbs that accurately express the intended meaning (e.g., 'help reduce consumption' or 'use less energy').