Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 표현을 더 자연스럽고 정확하게 고치세요. 특정 단어(예: "shoulder spike")의 오용을 바로잡고, 한두 문장으로 답변을 간결히 구조화하세요. 또한 연결어를 사용해 문장 사이 흐름을 개선하고, 구체적 디테일(장소, 활동, 감정)을 추가하면 더 풍부한 답변이 됩니다. 예: 주제문 → 추가 설명(언제/누가/어떤 모습이었는지) → 개인적 느낌.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it every day around the neighborhood. I remember practicing until I could ride without help, and it felt very freeing to explore the streets near my home.

提案: 질문을 정확히 이해하고 명확하게 답하세요. 먼저 직접적인 주제문으로 의견을 밝힌 뒤, 이유와 구체적 예시를 덧붙이세요. 발음·단어 선택 실수(예: "Hikes" 대신 "bikes"나 다른 교통수단을 말하려는 경우)도 피하세요. 연결어로 이유를 제시하고 한두 문장으로 마무리하세요. 예: 주제문 → 이유(통계나 관찰) → 예시.

例: I don't think so. Bicycles are not very common in my city because most people prefer cars and public transportation, which are more convenient for long distances. For instance, I rarely see adults cycling to work, although some students still use bikes to get to school.

× Well, I don't think so. Hikes are.

✓ Well, I don't think so. Bikes are.

The student likely intended to refer back to 'bikes' but mistakenly wrote 'hikes', which is a different noun. This is a word choice/pronoun-like reference error causing semantic confusion. Replace 'Hikes' with 'Bikes' to maintain coherence with the question about bicycles. Additionally, keep verb 'are' since the examiner's question asks about general popularity in the present tense; 'Bikes are' is a short answer implying 'Bikes are popular.' Suggestion: proofread for similar-looking words and ensure the subject matches the topic of the question.