Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct tense, use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Also fix grammar (use past tense consistently) and remove fillers.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It had training wheels, which helped me learn to balance and ride safely. Because of that, I became confident riding on my own by the time I was seven.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, use linking words to explain reasons, and provide a specific example or comparison. Correct small errors (e.g., 'take trains' or 'use trains'), and avoid vague phrases like 'European Europe country.'

例: Bikes are less popular in my country than in many European countries. For example, there are few dedicated bike lanes, so many people choose to take trains or buses instead, especially for longer commutes.

× Yes I have a bike when I was a yes I had a bike when I was a child, the bike I had was had the bike I had had had training wheels and it helped and they helped me to learn how to balance and and ride safely.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The bike had training wheels, and they helped me learn how to balance and ride safely.

The student mixed present tense 'have' with past-tense context; the correct tense for a childhood possession is past simple ('had'). There are also repeated words ('was had', 'had had had') and redundant phrases. Punctuation and sentence boundaries were missing, causing run-on sentences. Suggestion: Use past simple consistently for past events, remove duplicated words, split into two sentences, and use commas to separate clauses. Example: 'I had a bike when I was a child. The bike had training wheels, and they helped me learn how to balance and ride safely.'

× Bikes are less popular in my country than in many European countries because bike lanes are limited compared to the European Europe country.

✓ Bikes are less popular in my country than in many European countries because bike lanes are limited compared to those in European countries.

The phrase 'the European Europe country' is incorrect and redundant. Also 'compared to' needs a clear comparison object; use 'those in European countries' to refer to bike lanes there. Suggestion: Use a clear comparative phrase and avoid repeating 'European' and 'country'. Alternatively: 'compared to bike lanes in European countries.'

× As a result, people prefer to ride to take train, take some trains or other public transportation.

✓ As a result, people prefer to take trains or other public transportation.

The phrase 'prefer to ride to take train' is ungrammatical and redundant. 'Ride' is unnecessary here; the correct collocation is 'take trains' or 'use public transportation.' Also use plural 'trains' and include the article when needed ('take the train' or 'take trains'). Suggestion: Simplify to 'prefer to take trains or other public transportation.'