Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Correct vague phrasing (e.g. “reach each other” is unclear) and avoid redundancy like repeating “when I was a child.” Also keep the response under five sentences and vary vocabulary slightly (e.g. ‘ride around the neighborhood’, ‘play at the park’, ‘practise cycling’).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike with training wheels, and I used to ride it around the neighbourhood with my friends. We often cycled to the park every afternoon to practise tricks and play games together.

提案: Give a direct answer followed by at least one specific reason or example. Correct grammar and avoid fragmented sentences: combine ideas into a clear sentence (e.g. “I live in Turkey” not “I live in country is Turkey”). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘for example’ to explain popularity (commuting, exercise, affordable transport). Keep it to one or two supporting sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in Turkey because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, in larger cities you can see cyclists commuting to work and students riding bikes to university.

× For example, we would go to the park every afternoon and sometimes reach each other.

✓ For example, we would go to the park every afternoon and sometimes meet each other.

The verb phrase 'reach each other' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is that the friends met up, so the correct verb is 'meet'. 'Reach' suggests arriving at a destination or contacting someone, not meeting socially. Use 'meet each other' to convey meeting up in the park. This correction fits the past habitual context introduced by 'would'.

× Absolutely yes. I live in country is Turkey.

✓ Absolutely. I live in Turkey.

The original sentence has an incorrect sentence structure and extra words: 'I live in country is Turkey' combines two structures and is ungrammatical. Remove 'country is' and keep the simple present 'I live in Turkey' to answer the question about current residence. Also replace 'Absolutely yes.' with 'Absolutely.' for more natural response, though 'Absolutely yes' is not strictly ungrammatical.