Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with verb tenses and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense (e.g., “Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “I learned to ride when I was five, because my parents rented a small bike for me from a neighbor”). Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 short sentences) and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride when I was five after my parents rented a small bike from a neighbor, and I practiced every afternoon around our street until I felt confident.

提案: Provide a clearer opinion with specific reasons and use correct grammar. Begin with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines.”), then give one or two specific reasons or examples connected by linking words (e.g., “because many people use them for short commutes, and there is also a growing cycling community that treats it as a sport”). Avoid vague phrasing like “sometimes it became a sport.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. Moreover, cycling clubs and races have grown in recent years, so some people ride competitively as a sport.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I started doing it when I was five years old and I learned it through renting a bike on my neighborhood.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it when I was five years old by renting a bike in my neighborhood.

Problems: tense inconsistency (mixing present 'do have' with past context 'when I was a child') matches Present tense issue (6) and Past tense issue (5). Also incorrect verb form 'started doing it' and incorrect verb phrase 'learned it through renting a bike on my neighborhood' involve Verb + -ing form (8), Verb in the past participle form (9), and Incorrect use of prepositions (11). Correction details: use past simple 'had' for possession in the past, separate into two sentences for clarity, use 'learned to ride' (correct verb pattern: learn + to-infinitive) instead of 'started doing it', and use 'by renting a bike in my neighborhood' with preposition in. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (use past simple when talking about childhood), use 'learned to ride' or 'started riding' and use 'in my neighborhood' for location.

× Yes, in the Philippines bikes are very popular and sometimes it became a sport for some.

✓ Yes, in the Philippines bicycles are very popular, and sometimes they become a sport for some people.

Problems: use of 'bikes' is acceptable but 'bicycles' is more formal; main issues are tense and subject-verb agreement (Past tense issue (5) / Present tense issue (6) and Subject-verb agreement errors (27)): 'it became' mixes past with present context and uses singular 'it' for plural subject. Also missing word 'people' and preposition/word choice issues (11). Correction details: use present simple 'are' and 'become' for general statements, match plural subject with plural pronoun 'they', and add 'people' to clarify 'some'. Suggestion: When stating general facts, use present simple and ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents; write 'sometimes they become a sport for some people' or better 'for some people it is a sport.'