Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g. “wheels” rather than “Michelin”), and avoid repetition. Keep answers under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small bicycle with three wheels when I was five, and I used it for playing in the park and getting some exercise. Because it was stable, I felt confident learning new skills, and I enjoyed riding it with my friends.

提案: Answer directly and give clear reasons with linking words. Start with a topic sentence (e.g. “Not really” or “Yes, they are”), then provide one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar and avoid unclear phrases. Keep to under five sentences.

例: Not really. In my city, many people prefer cars or public transport because roads can be crowded and cycling feels unsafe. For example, parents often avoid buying bikes for young children due to heavy traffic and a lack of bike lanes.

× Uh, when I watch you, I I have a bike, uh, a bike, it goes 3 Michelin and I always use use this to entertaining and train.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike. It had three wheels and I always used it for entertainment and practice.

Problems identified: present-tense verbs used incorrectly for past events (Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue and 5: Past tense issue), repetition and unclear phrasing (26: Sentence structure errors), incorrect pronoun/object use (12: Incorrect use of pronouns) and subject-verb agreement in tense context (27). Reason: The speaker is describing a past situation, so past tense verbs are required (was, had, used). 'Watch you' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'was a child' to set the time frame. 'It goes 3 Michelin' is ungrammatical – likely meant 'it had three wheels' or 'three Michelin tires' but in context 'three wheels' fits a child's bike. 'Use use this to entertaining and train' mixes base verb forms and gerunds incorrectly; 'used it for entertainment and practice' uses the correct past tense and correct noun forms. Suggestion: Set the time frame with a past-tense clause (When I was a child), use past tense verbs consistently (had, used), replace unclear phrases with specific nouns ('three wheels' or 'three tires'), remove repeated words, and use 'for' + noun (for entertainment/practice) or 'to' + base verb (to entertain, to practice) consistently.

× I don't think so because when I had you, I don't see everyone have a bike like me because it's my it's very dangerous for children and I think everyone's parents don't. Shoot you.

✓ I don't think so. When I was young, I did not see many people with bikes like mine because they are very dangerous for children, and I think many parents do not allow them.

Problems identified: incorrect tense and auxiliary verbs (5: Past tense issue and 6: Present tense issue), incorrect pronouns ('you' used instead of 'young' or 'childhood') and wrong auxiliary 'don't see' for past context, missing agreement and sentence fragments (26: Sentence structure errors), and a nonsensical fragment 'don't. Shoot you.' Reason: The speaker intends to refer to their childhood ('when I was young' or 'when I was a child') so past tense is required: 'did not see' rather than 'don't see'. 'Everyone have' is incorrect; use 'many people have' or 'many people with bikes' and adjust verb agreement: 'people with bikes' or 'people who had bikes'. 'It's my it's very dangerous' is ungrammatical and should be 'they are very dangerous' referring to bikes. 'Everyone's parents don't. Shoot you.' is unintelligible; likely intended 'parents do not allow them' or 'don't let them ride bikes.' Suggestion: Use correct past-time markers (when I was young), use past simple for observations in the past (did not see), use plural agreement for 'bikes' and 'they', and replace unclear fragments with explicit verbs like 'allow' or 'let.'