Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer partially answers the question but has serious problems with grammar, clarity and natural phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence (simple past) and avoid extraneous or unclear phrases. Use one or two supporting details (briefly) and keep the response within 2–4 sentences. Correct verb forms and possessive structure (e.g., “I had a bike my parents gave me”) and remove unintelligible fragments.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my sixth birthday, and I used to ride it to the park every weekend.

提案: This answer is generally relevant and mostly clear but has grammatical errors (subject-verb agreement, singular/plural) and could be more specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then use linking words to contrast popularity of motorbikes with traditional bikes. Provide one concrete example or brief reason to add depth (e.g., commuting habits, affordability).

例: In Vietnam, motorbikes and electric scooters have become much more popular in recent years. However, many people still ride traditional bicycles for exercise or short trips, especially in parks and rural areas.

× Yes I have gonna work a kiss.

✓ Yes, I was going to work a kiosk.

The original sentence uses 'have gonna' which is nonstandard and ungrammatical. 'Gonna' is informal for 'going to' and must follow an auxiliary (I am going to). The phrase 'work a kiss' appears to be a typo or wrong word choice; context suggests 'kiosk' (a small shop) or 'ride' but 'kiosk' fits common childhood jobs. The corrected sentence uses past continuous idea 'was going to' to match past-time frame (the examiner asked about childhood) and fixes word choice and punctuation. Suggestion: use standard forms (I was going to) and check for correct nouns (kiosk vs kiss).

× I had a bike that my parents gave it to me on my 6th birthday.

✓ I had a bike that my parents gave me on my sixth birthday.

The original sentence contains a redundancy: 'that my parents gave it to me' uses both the relative clause object 'that' and the pronoun 'it', which is unnecessary. Also '6th' is better written as 'sixth' in formal writing. The corrected sentence removes the redundant pronoun and uses the object 'me' correctly. Suggestion: in relative clauses, avoid repeating the object; use either 'that my parents gave me' or 'which they gave me'.

× In Vietnam, motorbikes and electric bike has become popular in recent years.

✓ In Vietnam, motorbikes and electric bikes have become popular in recent years.

The subject 'motorbikes and electric bike' is plural and requires the plural noun form 'electric bikes' and the plural verb 'have' rather than 'has'. Also 'in recent years' indicates a present perfect tense ('have become') is appropriate. The corrected sentence ensures subject-verb agreement and consistent plural nouns. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and plural noun forms when listing multiple items.

× However, many people still use a bike for exercise.

✓ However, many people still use bikes for exercise.

When speaking generally about people using bicycles, plural 'bikes' is more natural than singular 'a bike'. The original is not strictly ungrammatical but sounds less natural. The corrected sentence uses plural to match 'many people' and generalize the action. Suggestion: with general statements about many people, use plural nouns (use bikes) or a gerund phrase (ride bikes).