Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Parla in modo più fluido e strutturato: comincia con una frase tematica chiara, evita riempitivi come “uh” e aggiungi un dettaglio specifico che arricchisca la risposta (ad esempio perché tuo padre lo ha fatto o come ti sei sentito). Usa una o due frasi di supporto collegate con connettori semplici come “because” o “so”.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle until I was eight because my family lived near a park where I practised every day. However, my father later gave it to a friend’s daughter, so I stopped using it regularly.

提案: Rendi la risposta più organizzata e specifica: inizia con una frase chiara che esprima la tua opinione, poi fornisci due ragioni concrete collegate da connettori come “because” o “however”. Evita errori grammaticali (es. “they know”) e confronti generici—spiega brevemente il paragone con Paesi come i Paesi Bassi.

例: Yes, I think cycling is becoming more popular in my country because many cities have recently built dedicated bike lanes and more people choose bikes for short trips. However, it is still less common than in countries like the Netherlands, where cycling infrastructure and culture are much more developed.

× Uh, yes, I used to have, but not anymore because uh, later when I was 8 years old, uh, my father gave my bike to his friend, uh, daughter.

✓ Uh, yes, I used to have one, but not anymore because when I was eight years old my father gave my bike to his friend's daughter.

The sentence misuses tense and contains awkward phrasing. 'Used to have' is correct for a past habitual state but needs an object ('one'). The adverb 'later' is unnecessary and the clause 'when I was 8 years old' should directly link to the past action. Use possessive 'his friend's daughter' instead of separate nouns. Suggestions: remove filler words, spell out numbers in formal speech, and place time clauses adjacent to the verb they modify. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I feel like nowadays it's become more popular because now we have bike roads, but before they know we had no roads for bikes.

✓ I feel like nowadays it has become more popular because we now have bike lanes, but before that we had no roads for bikes.

The original mixes present and past incorrectly. Use present perfect 'has become' to describe a change up to the present. Replace 'now' position for clarity and change 'bike roads' to 'bike lanes' (more idiomatic). Remove 'they know' which is incorrect here; use 'before that' to refer to the past situation. Suggestions: use present perfect for recent changes and avoid inserting irrelevant pronouns. Grammar problem type ID:6

× So I think it's popular but not that much As for example in Netherlands.

✓ So I think bicycles are fairly popular, but not as much as, for example, in the Netherlands.

The sentence is fragmented and punctuation/capitalization errors occur. Use a clearer comparative construction 'not as much as' and include the definite article 'the' before 'Netherlands'. Also replace 'It's' (it is) with 'bicycles are' to clarify the subject. Suggestions: combine clauses into a coherent comparative sentence, use the definite article with country names like the Netherlands, and avoid abrupt phrases like 'as for example'. Grammar problem type ID:17