Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более прямо и грамматически корректно. Начните с темы (Yes/No), затем добавьте одно-два предложения с конкретной информацией (когда, кто, как часто) и избегайте заполнителей («umm», «uh»). Используйте связку для плавного перехода и ограничьте длину до 3–4 предложений.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bicycle from the age of six and rode it almost every day after school. It helped me stay active and made it easy to visit my friends in the neighborhood.

提案: Дайте более развёрнутый и связный ответ: начните с прямого утверждения, затем объясните 2 конкретных причины (например, здоровье и экология) с примерами или краткими фактами. Избегайте повторов и слов-паразитов, используйте связующие слова (for example, therefore, moreover). Ограничьте ответ до 3–4 предложений.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, many people cycle to stay fit and reduce traffic, and there are also more bike lanes in cities now for environmental reasons. Therefore, cycling has become both a healthy and eco-friendly choice for many residents.

× As I did umm, because I was a child that was umm, active in their childhood.

✓ Yes, I did, because I was an active child.

Pronoun and sentence-structure errors: the speaker mixes 'I' and 'their' which is inconsistent. Use a singular pronoun to match the subject ('I'). The original also has redundant and unclear phrasing ('a child that was active in their childhood'). The corrected sentence uses a clear, concise structure: 'Yes, I did, because I was an active child.' Suggestion: keep subject pronouns consistent and avoid repeating the same idea twice. Grammar problem type id: 12

× I think yes, umm, because it is, uh, the approach to the solution of umm, ecology.

✓ Yes, I think so, because it is an approach to solving environmental problems.

Article and word-choice issues: 'the approach to the solution of ecology' is unnatural. Use 'an approach' (indefinite article) and a more natural phrase 'to solving environmental problems' instead of 'to the solution of ecology.' Also replace 'ecology' with 'environmental problems' for clarity. Suggestion: choose idiomatic collocations ('approach to solving') and correct articles. Grammar problem type id: 22

× And many people do do biking, uh, because it is a fitness.

✓ Many people also cycle because it is good for fitness.

Verb and word-choice errors: 'do do biking' is redundant; use a single verb ('cycle') or 'go biking.' 'Because it is a fitness' is incorrect noun usage; use 'good for fitness' or 'good exercise.' Suggestion: avoid repeating verbs and choose correct collocations ('good for fitness', 'good exercise'). Grammar problem type id: 8