Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate with tense and sentence structure, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific details using linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then provide supporting details with linking words such as "so" or "for example." Keep the answer to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike from when I was five, and it was a big part of my childhood. I used it to ride to school and to the park, so I often met friends there to play. For example, we would race along the river path on weekends, which helped me feel independent and active.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (e.g., "because," "for example," "also") to make the answer coherent. Try to include a brief comparison or brief statistic if possible to sound more informative.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient way to travel. For example, many people cycle to work in cities to avoid traffic, and some towns have dedicated bike lanes. Also, cycling is popular for exercise and leisure, especially on weekends.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was five years old and I use this bike to go to school or or I ride it to park, to play with other children.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was five years old and I used this bike to go to school or ride it to the park to play with other children.

The sentence mixes present tense ('have', 'use', 'ride') with a past time reference ('when I was five years old'). Use past tense verbs to match the past time frame: 'had' and 'used'. Also remove the duplicated 'or' and add the definite article 'the' before 'park' for natural English. Suggestion: always match verb tense to the time expression and proofread for duplicated words and missing articles.

× It has become part of my childhood.

✓ It became part of my childhood.

The present perfect 'has become' implies a connection to the present; because the speaker is describing a past period ('my childhood') simple past 'became' is more appropriate. Use consistent past tense when narrating past experiences. Suggestion: when referring to finished past periods, prefer simple past ('became').

× Of course, people generally use bikes as a means of transportation to go to work or to go out for recreation.

✓ Of course, people generally use bikes as a means of transportation to go to work or to go out for recreation.

This sentence is grammatically correct; tense and structure suit a general statement about current habits. No correction needed. Explanation: present simple is appropriate for habitual actions.

× In addition, those who enjoy sport also take riding as a form of physical exercise.

✓ In addition, those who enjoy sports also take up riding as a form of physical exercise.

Use the plural 'sports' for general activities and the phrasing 'take up riding' to indicate beginning or practicing an activity. The original 'take riding' is incorrect collocation. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'take up' with hobbies and 'sports' plural when speaking generally.