Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and add one specific supporting detail (e.g., what kind of bike, who you rode with, or a short memory). Keep the whole answer within 2–3 sentences and use a linking phrase if you add detail.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle with a bell, and I often rode it to the park with my friends after school.

提案: Avoid hesitation and ungrammatical phrasing. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific supporting reasons and use linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') to make the response coherent. Also use plural and neutral pronouns correctly (e.g., 'children' or 'people'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and provide one clear reason or example.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many children use them for short trips and play. For example, most neighborhoods have safe paths where children ride their bikes after school.

× Yes, it is uh, every uh, child in my country, uh, had a bike when he was young and uh, he used it, uh, and uh. And riding it around the neighborhood.

✓ Yes, many children in my country have bikes when they are young, and they ride them around the neighborhood.

The original sentence mixes present and past tenses and uses awkward subject references. Use present tense to answer a general statement about popularity: 'children ... have' (present simple). Also correct pronoun agreement: 'many children' requires plural verbs and plural pronouns ('they', 'them'). Remove filler words and fragment 'And riding it' by making it part of the main clause: 'and they ride them around the neighborhood.' This ensures tense consistency and subject-verb agreement.