Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (uh, umm) and repetition. For example, name the training wheels and briefly say why it mattered to you.

例: Yes. I had a small bicycle as a child with training wheels to help me learn. Because I lived near a quiet park, I practised there every weekend, which helped me become confident riding without help by the age of eight.

提案: Give a clear direct opinion then support it with specific observations and a comparison using linking words. Reduce small grammar errors (e.g., 'Netherlands' should be 'the Netherlands', 'a lot of people on bicycle' -> 'many people cycling'). Use one or two concise sentences for support.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in France. For instance, I often see many people cycling in cities and parks; however, the Netherlands has even more cyclists, where cycling is a primary mode of transport and bike lanes are everywhere.

× Yeah, I used to have a bike when I was like a child and this was a a small bicycle, uh, with two, umm, I don't know how to say, but you know, when there are like things to help you to learn by cycle.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike when I was a child. It was a small bicycle with two training wheels to help you learn to ride.

ID 10: The original sentence contained awkward and incorrect use of verb forms and phrases such as 'learn by cycle' and unclear filler words. Replace 'learn by cycle' with the present participle construction 'learn to ride' which correctly expresses the ongoing action of learning a skill. Also simplify fillers and split into two sentences for clarity. Use 'training wheels' as the correct noun phrase for the supports on a child's bike.

× Yes, they are very popular in France.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in France.

ID 2: The original sentence 'they are very popular in France' is not incorrect grammatically but is vague; replacing the pronoun 'they' with the clear noun 'bikes' improves clarity and prevents pronoun reference issues. Keep present simple for general fact.

× When I go out, I see a lot of people on bicycle, but I do not think it's the country where there is the most bicycle.

✓ When I go out, I see a lot of people on bicycles, but I do not think it is the country with the most bicycles.

ID 11: Use the plural 'bicycles' after 'people on' and use the preposition 'with' to express comparison ('the country with the most bicycles'). Also use 'it is' instead of contraction for formality is optional; correct plural forms are required.

× When I was in Netherlands and my sister used to live in Netherlands, there is a lot of people on bicycle.

✓ When I was in the Netherlands and my sister used to live there, there were a lot of people on bicycles.

ID 5: The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Use past tense 'were' to match 'When I was' and 'used to live'. Also include the definite article 'the' with 'Netherlands', replace repeated 'in Netherlands' with 'there', and pluralize 'bicycles'. This ensures subject-verb tense agreement and correct article usage.