Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and coherent linking. Start with a simple direct answer (Yes/No), then give one or two specific reasons using correct verb tenses and linking words (for example, 'because' and 'so'). Avoid redundant phrases and incorrect expressions like 'my own part' or 'license of the driving.'

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents didn’t allow me to ride one, and I didn’t have a driving licence, so I usually used public transport to get around.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific, well-linked reasons and a brief comparison. Use more accurate vocabulary (e.g. 'popular', 'convenient', 'crowded', 'more practical than cars') and avoid repetition. Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. Moreover, during rush hour bikes are often more practical than cars since they can weave through traffic and are easier to park.

× I remember when I was a child, I don't have the my own part because my parents don't allow me to take a bike and as well I wanted to know I don't have any license of the driving so that's why I'm using public transport instead of my own bikes.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I didn't have my own bike because my parents didn't allow me to take one, and I didn't have a driving license, so I used public transport instead of a bike.

Errors include incorrect articles ('the my own part' should be 'my own bike'), unnecessary words, and wrong verb tenses. Use 'didn't' for past negation (past tense) and 'my own bike' to refer to possession. Remove 'part' and 'of the driving' is incorrect; use 'a driving license'. Also match tense across clauses: past simple for habits or facts in the past. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use 'didn't have' and 'my own bike', and keep verbs in past simple when describing childhood facts.

× I remember when I was a child, I don't have the my own part because my parents don't allow me to take a bike and as well I wanted to know I don't have any license of the driving so that's why I'm using public transport instead of my own bikes.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I didn't have my own bike because my parents didn't allow me to take one, and I didn't have a driving license, so I used public transport instead of a bike.

The speaker mixed present simple ('don't have', 'don't allow', 'I'm using') with past-time reference. When describing past situations, use past simple verbs: 'didn't have', 'didn't allow', 'used'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent; use past simple throughout for past events.

× I remember when I was a child, I don't have the my own part because my parents don't allow me to take a bike and as well I wanted to know I don't have any license of the driving so that's why I'm using public transport instead of my own bikes.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I didn't have my own bike because my parents didn't allow me to take one, and I didn't have a driving license, so I used public transport instead of a bike.

Problems with pronouns and determiners: 'the my own part' is ungrammatical — use 'my own bike' to show possession. 'Take a bike' is better as 'take one' when referring back to 'bike'. 'My own bikes' is inconsistent (plural) when speaking of a single bike; use singular 'a bike' or 'one'. Suggestion: use correct possessive pronouns (my) and matching singular/plural forms.

× I remember when I was a child, I don't have the my own part because my parents don't allow me to take a bike and as well I wanted to know I don't have any license of the driving so that's why I'm using public transport instead of my own bikes.

✓ I remember that when I was a child, I didn't have my own bike because my parents didn't allow me to take one, and I didn't have a driving license, so I used public transport instead of a bike.

The phrase 'license of the driving' incorrectly uses 'of the'. Correct phrase is 'a driving license' or 'a driver's license'. Also 'using public transport' should be 'used public transport' for past. Suggestion: use standard collocations: 'driving license' or 'driver's license' and appropriate prepositions/articles.

× Yeah, and my country bikes are most popular in there because it is a convenient way to travel anywhere and in the busy time bikes are most, most good as compared to the cars and any other vehicle.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are a convenient way to travel, and during busy times bikes are much better than cars or other vehicles.

Errors: 'my country bikes are most popular in there' misuses quantifiers and word order. Use 'bikes are very popular in my country'. 'Most, most good' is ungrammatical; use 'much better' or 'far better'. Also match plural subjects with plural verbs: 'bikes are'. Suggestion: use appropriate quantifiers ('very popular', 'much better') and correct word order ('in my country', 'during busy times').

× Yeah, and my country bikes are most popular in there because it is a convenient way to travel anywhere and in the busy time bikes are most, most good as compared to the cars and any other vehicle.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are a convenient way to travel, and during busy times bikes are much better than cars or other vehicles.

Subject-verb agreement errors: 'my country bikes are' is awkward and 'it is a convenient way' uses 'it' for plural 'bikes'—should be 'they are a convenient way'. Also 'the busy time' should be 'busy times' or 'during busy times'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun refers back to correct noun (they for bikes) and keep noun-verb number consistent.