Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid casual interjections like “Hey” and repetition (e.g., “special bike, a beautiful bike”). Also keep answers concise (no more than 3–4 sentences). Focus on specifics such as when you got it, who gave it to you, or what made it special.

例: Yes, I did. I got a bright red bicycle for my eighth birthday from my parents, and I loved it because it had a comfortable seat and a bell. As a result, I spent every afternoon riding with my friends around the neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague or incorrect grammar (e.g., “each children's can have a bike”). Don’t repeat phrases or ask rhetorically. Keep sentences grammatical and concise. Provide one or two concrete reasons or examples showing popularity (e.g., bike lanes, cultural habits, affordability).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many cities have dedicated bike lanes and families often buy bicycles for children. For example, when I was growing up, most children rode to school or to parks, which shows how common biking is.

× Hey, yes, I had a special bike, a beautiful bike.

✓ Yes, I had a special bike, a beautiful one.

The original sentence begins with an informal interjection 'Hey,' which is unnecessary in this context; removing it creates a more natural past-tense answer. The past tense 'had' is correct, but repeating 'bike' is redundant. Replace the second 'bike' with 'one' for concision and natural phrasing. Suggestion: Omit informal fillers in formal tests and avoid repeating nouns; use 'one' as a substitute.

× Actually, each children's can have a bike at home.

✓ Actually, each child can have a bike at home.

'Children' is the plural form; 'each' must be followed by a singular noun. The phrase 'each children's' is incorrect. Use 'each child' (singular) with 'each' to indicate every individual. Also 'can have a bike at home' is acceptable for ability or possibility. Suggestion: Use 'each child' when referring to individuals in a group.

× When I was a child, I remember my childhood.

✓ When I was a child, I remember many things from my childhood.

The original sentence is redundant: 'When I was a child' and 'I remember my childhood' repeat the same idea, making the sentence awkward. Clarify by specifying what you remember or merge into a single clear statement. Keep tense consistent: 'When I was a child' (past) with 'I remember' (present) can be acceptable to indicate present memory, but clarity improves by specifying 'I remember many things from my childhood.' Suggestion: Avoid repetition; either say 'When I was a child, I...' (followed by a past action) or 'I remember my childhood' (followed by specifics).

× It's regarding to right?

✓ It's regarding that, right? OR That is correct, right?

The phrase 'regarding to' is incorrect; 'regarding' does not take the preposition 'to.' Common alternatives: 'regarding that' (formal) or more naturally 'That's right, isn't it?' or 'Isn't that right?' For a short conversational tag use 'right?' or 'isn't it?'. Suggestion: Use 'regarding' with a noun phrase (e.g., 'regarding the rules') or replace with 'that's right' when seeking confirmation.