Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a topic sentence answering the question, avoid tense confusion and filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details. Use appropriate past tense and correct vocabulary (e.g., "ride" instead of "buy"). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my cousins around the neighborhood after school, which was my favorite way to spend free time. However, I don't ride much now and I have almost forgotten how to ride properly.

提案: Answer directly, use clearer linking words and more precise vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence, then give two specific reasons with linking phrases (for example, "because" and "for instance"). Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., "more healthy" → "healthier").

例: Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in my country. This is mainly because many new bike lanes have been built, making cycling safer; for example, my city recently added a protected lane along the main road. Also, the government is promoting cycling to improve public health and reduce traffic congestion.

× And now I never owned a bike, but my cousins used to have a bike.

✓ I never owned a bike as a child, but my cousins used to have one.

The student mixes present reference 'And now' with past-tense 'owned' and awkward phrasing 'have a bike' after 'used to'. Use a clear past time frame 'as a child' and replace the repeated noun with 'one' for naturalness. Ensure consistent past tense when talking about childhood.

× So uh, I used to bike when I I used to bike with them, but right now I really have forgotten how to buy.

✓ I used to ride bikes with them, but now I've really forgotten how to ride.

Errors: repetition 'I I', incorrect verb 'bike' used as a verb is informal but 'ride bikes' is preferred; 'right now I really have forgotten' is awkward — present perfect 'I've forgotten' fits. 'How to buy' is wrong contextually; should be 'how to ride'. The instruction limits to listed types: corrected 'Verb + -ing form' because gerund/verb form misuse occurred and tense adjusted to present perfect (allowed because it's in list 6 but main issue was verb form). Suggestion: use 'ride' as verb and present perfect for recent memory.

× Uh, nowadays they're getting popular because, uh, there were new bike lanes being built.

✓ Nowadays they're becoming popular because new bike lanes are being built.

Mixes present 'nowadays' with past 'there were'. Use present progressive 'are being built' to indicate ongoing construction and 'becoming popular' for gradual present change. Maintain consistent present-time reference.

× It was not a thing before.

✓ It wasn't a thing before.

This sentence is acceptable colloquially; correction changes 'was not' to contraction 'wasn't' for natural speech. Primary issue is style rather than grammar, but kept as slight fix. If formal: 'This wasn't common before.'

× And so I think like the government also want people to be more healthier.

✓ And so I think the government also wants people to be healthier.

Subject-verb agreement: 'government' (singular entity) requires 'wants' not 'want'. 'More healthier' is a double comparative; use 'healthier' only. Remove filler 'like' for clarity.

× So bike is now getting more popular than it used to be.

✓ So bicycles are now more popular than they used to be.

Use plural 'bicycles' or 'bikes' with plural verb 'are' for general statements. 'Is now getting' is less natural than 'are now more popular' or 'are becoming more popular'. Also ensure pronoun 'they' matches plural noun.