Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and relevant, with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve, make the response slightly more concise (avoid repetition like “did have”) and add one brief reflective or evaluative sentence to enrich content (e.g., why it was memorable or how you used it). Use a linking word to connect the description to the reflection.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink with tassels on the handlebars, and I remember it vividly because I learned to ride it in a nearby park. As a result, I became more confident and spent a lot of time outdoors.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives examples, but it is repetitive and contains unclear phrasing (e.g., “the food delivery,” and the final sentence is incomplete). To improve: state a clear main point, organize supporting reasons with linking words (for example, “Firstly,” “Secondly,” or “Also”), give a specific example or statistic if possible, and finish your final sentence. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “couriers” or “delivery riders”). Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: I think bikes are fairly popular in my country, but they are not the main mode of transport. For example, many teenagers ride bikes for leisure, and delivery couriers often use bicycles in busy city areas. However, cars and public transport are still used more for daily commuting, so bikes are important but not dominant.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did' with the past simple verb 'have' is unnecessary and can be used for emphasis or in questions/negatives. In a simple affirmative past statement, use the past simple form 'had'. Suggestion: say 'I had' for normal statements and use 'did have' only for emphasis (e.g., 'I did have a bike').

× In my opinion, bikes are popular in my country but not too much.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are somewhat popular in my country, but not very much.

'Not too much' is informal and awkward after 'popular'; restructure to 'somewhat popular' or 'popular, but not very much' to convey the idea clearly. Suggestion: use adverbs or quantifiers that match the adjective 'popular' (somewhat, fairly, not very much).

× I mean people my age, like teenagers, love to ride bikes in their free time.

✓ I mean people my age, such as teenagers, love to ride bikes in their free time.

'Like' is colloquial and can imply similarity rather than examples; 'such as' is clearer for giving examples. Suggestion: use 'such as' or 'for example' when listing examples in formal speech.

× It's an excellent form of exercise and the food delivery.

✓ It's an excellent form of exercise and a good option for food delivery.

The original pairs 'form of exercise' with 'the food delivery', which is ungrammatical and unclear. Use parallel structure and correct noun phrases: 'a good option for food delivery' or 'useful for food delivery'. Suggestion: keep coordination parallel (both noun phrases) and choose appropriate articles.

× People use bikes to get to the areas where they are needed.

✓ People use bikes to reach areas where they are needed.

'Get to the areas where they are needed' is wordy and 'they' ambiguously refers to people or bikes. 'Reach areas where they are needed' still leaves ambiguity; better: 'where bikes are needed' or 'where people need them'. Here corrected to 'reach areas where they are needed' keeping pronoun referent as bikes. Suggestion: clarify the referent or restate as 'where people need them.'

× It is used as a transportation system, but not as much as.

✓ Bikes are used as a means of transportation, but not as much as other modes.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'but not as much as' leaving out the comparison object. Also 'It is used' is vague. Provide a clear comparison: 'not as much as other modes (of transport)'. Suggestion: always complete comparisons by stating what the subject is being compared to.