Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid long, vague phrases (e.g. “takes me back to the memory lanes”) and incomplete sentences. Use linking words if you add details and finish your sentence fully.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small purple bicycle when I was about three years old. It had training wheels and I loved riding it around the garden near my home, especially in the evenings when my family watched me.

提案: Start with a clear, direct opinion, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete clauses. Mention concrete examples (e.g. traffic, cost, convenience) and finish thoughts fully.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Because cities are densely populated and traffic is often heavy, many people choose motorcycles and bicycles as a faster and cheaper way to get around. For example, commuters can navigate narrow streets and avoid long traffic jams more easily on two wheels.

× So this takes me back to the memory lanes and I remember I had a purple coloured bike when I was around 3 years old and I really loved walking through my garden at my hometown which is.

✓ This takes me back to the memory lane, and I remember I had a purple-colored bike when I was about three years old, and I really loved riding it through the garden in my hometown.

Errors: 'memory lanes' should be 'memory lane' (idiomatic singular), 'walking through my garden' is inappropriate for riding a bike and 'at my hometown' is incorrect preposition use. Grammar problem type 10 (Verb in the present participle form) applies because 'walking' is the wrong present participle choice for the intended action; use 'riding' instead. Also corrected phrasing: 'around 3 years old' -> 'about three years old' for natural expression, and 'purple coloured' -> 'purple-colored'. Suggestion: choose the correct present participle that matches the main verb (ride -> riding) and use proper idiomatic expressions and prepositions (in my hometown, memory lane).

× I think I definitely think bike.

✓ I definitely think bikes are popular.

The original sentence is fragmented and ungrammatical: 'I think I definitely think bike' repeats 'think' and lacks a verb or plural form. This matches Grammar Problem Type 26 (sentence structure errors). Correction provides a complete clause with subject and verb and uses plural 'bikes' to refer generally. Suggestion: avoid repetition and ensure a full clause with appropriate number for countable nouns (bikes).

× Bikes are very popular in my country because of the amount of population and the streets are always crowded and to travel from one place to another.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because of the large population and crowded streets, which makes them a convenient way to travel from one place to another.

Original sentence is awkward and contains poor structure: 'amount of population' is incorrect phrase, and the sentence fragments 'and the streets are always crowded and to travel...' are ungrammatical. This is Grammar Problem Type 26 (sentence structure errors). Correction replaces 'amount of population' with 'large population', links clauses with a relative pronoun 'which', and clarifies that bikes make travel convenient. Suggestion: use 'large population' or 'high population density', avoid fragments, and connect ideas with appropriate relative clauses.

× Usually bikes offer a very fast alternative and which makes.

✓ Usually, bikes offer a very fast alternative, which makes them popular.

The clause 'and which makes' is incomplete and misuses the relative connector. This matches Grammar Problem Type 10 (Verb in the present participle form) in the sense that the participial/relative clause is incorrect; a complete relative clause 'which makes them popular' is needed. Suggestion: complete the thought by specifying the result and ensure the relative clause refers clearly to the subject ('bikes').