Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer concise and correct grammar, start with a clear topic sentence, and then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word choice (e.g., "had," "bike," "ride," "when I was"), and avoid redundancy. Pronunciation and fluency could be improved by practicing calm, evenly paced sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for my fifth birthday, and I remember being so excited to ride it for the first time. Also, my older sister taught me how to balance, which helped me learn quickly.

提案: Give a direct opinion sentence, then support it with one or two clear, specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because," "however," "therefore"). Use correct grammar (e.g., "bikes are popular," "people ride bikes," "motorbikes"). Reduce hesitations and filler words to sound more fluent.

例: Yes, bikes are somewhat popular in my country, but less so in cities. In urban areas people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for busy streets; however, bikes remain common in smaller towns and for recreation.

× Definitely, I have a buy from about the age of five and my parents gave it to me as a birthday present and I was really excited to write it for the first time and also my older sister taught me about how to balance when I ready.

✓ Definitely, I had a bike from about the age of five; my parents gave it to me as a birthday present, and I was really excited to ride it for the first time. Also, my older sister taught me how to balance when I was ready.

Multiple errors corrected that match allowed types: 'have a buy' uses wrong verb and noun form and should be 'had a bike' (past possession) — this is a past tense issue (use past simple for childhood). 'write it' is incorrect word choice; should be 'ride it' (lexical error treated as verb form). 'when I ready' is missing auxiliary and adjective form — should be 'when I was ready' (incorrect verb form/omitted verb). Suggestions: use past simple to describe past possession or events (had, gave, was), use correct verb 'ride' for bicycles, and include auxiliary 'was' before adjectives describing state in the past. Keep clauses clear and use punctuation to separate ideas.

× Oh umm, in my opinion by it are popular in my country, but not almost the time people riding a bike in the cities because uh, the motorbike is more convenient and more popular than the bike and uh in the road there are lots of bike, motorbike and cars.

✓ Oh, um, in my opinion bikes are popular in my country, but not all the time do people ride bikes in the cities because motorbikes are more convenient and more popular than bicycles, and on the roads there are lots of bicycles, motorbikes, and cars.

Errors addressed include subject-verb order and verb forms: 'by it are popular' is incorrect word order and pronoun; correct is 'bikes are popular' (present simple). 'not almost the time' is wrong quantifier/order; correct is 'not all the time'. 'people riding a bike' lacks auxiliary and should be 'do people ride bikes' for negative inversion emphasis. 'the motorbike is' should be 'motorbikes are' for general statement (plural subject with present simple). 'in the road' should be 'on the roads' (preposition and plural). 'lots of bike, motorbike and cars' needs plural nouns and commas. Suggestions: use present simple for general facts with correct subject-verb agreement, use plural nouns for general statements, use 'do' for questions or negative inversion in present simple, and prefer 'on the roads' for vehicles' location.