Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Исправьте ошибки в грамматике и порядок слов; используйте простые связки и уточняющие детали. Например, начните с ясного тематического предложения, затем добавьте одно или два уточняющих предложения с правильными временами и местоимениями. Избегайте лишних слов и странных форм (например, «I were a child», «pink color small bike», «four balloons» — уточните связь). Можно сказать о возрасте, внешнем виде велосипеда и первом опыте езды последовательно и логично.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small pink bike that I loved. I remember learning to ride it with training wheels at first, and my parents removed them when I was more confident. The first time I rode without help I felt very proud.

提案: Уточните своё мнение прямо и используйте правильные грамматические структуры и связки. Начните с простого утверждения, затем приведите конкретные причины и примеры, используя времена и местоимения корректно. Избегайте повторов и незавершённых фраз («Yes you do», «who making training», «sometimes preparing for»).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people ride bicycles in the early morning and evening to exercise, and some train for races or commuting. For example, I often see groups of cyclists practicing together along the river.

× I were a child.

✓ I was a child.

The verb 'to be' in the past tense for the first and third person singular is 'was', not 'were'. Use 'was' with singular subjects: 'I was', 'he/she/it was'. Suggestion: learn past forms of 'to be' and practice simple past statements.

× It was a pink color small bike.

✓ It was a small pink bike.

Word order for multiple adjectives in English places size before color: 'small pink bike'. Also 'pink color' is redundant; use the adjective 'pink'. Suggestion: follow adjective order (size, shape, age, color) and avoid unnecessary nouns like 'color' after color adjectives.

× First time I ride it with four balloons.

✓ The first time I rode it I had four balloons attached.

The context refers to a past event, so use past simple 'rode' not present 'ride'. Also the phrase needs 'the' before 'first time' and a clearer structure. Suggestion: use past tense for past events and include articles and objects for clarity.

× After that, two additional balloons we removed and I started.

✓ After that, we removed two of the balloons and I started riding on my own.

The original sentence has wrong word order and missing verb object. Place subject before verb: 'we removed', clarify which balloons 'two of the balloons', and complete the action 'started riding'. Suggestion: ensure correct subject-verb order and complete the meaning of actions.

× Yes you do, because there are a lot of bikers in morning or evening who making training.

✓ Yes, I think so, because there are a lot of cyclists in the morning and in the evening who do training.

'You do' is wrong for answering about general popularity; use 'I think so' or 'Yes, they are' depending on meaning. 'Bikers' is acceptable but 'cyclists' is more natural. Include articles 'the morning'/'the evening'. 'Who making training' lacks auxiliary verb; use 'who do training' or 'who train'. Suggestion: use appropriate pronouns for opinion statements, add definite articles with times of day, and include auxiliaries for -ing verbs.

× And preparing, sometimes preparing for.

✓ Sometimes they train to prepare for events.

The fragment is incomplete and uses redundant 'preparing'. Provide a full clause: 'They train to prepare for events' or 'Sometimes they prepare for competitions.' Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and repeat words; combine into a complete thought using conjunctions and infinitive phrases.