Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and grammatical, give a direct topic sentence, then a brief reason or detail. Avoid confusing phrases like "didn't know how to write on it" and keep to one to three sentences. Use linking words for clarity (e.g., "because", "so").

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I never learned how to ride, so my parents didn't buy one for me.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, then give two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because", "so", "however"). Avoid fragmented phrases and repetition. Be concise and include a brief prediction or wish if relevant.

例: I would say no, bikes are not very popular in my country because there are few safe bike lanes and little cycling infrastructure. As a result, you rarely see people cycling on the streets, but I hope that will change in the future as cities improve facilities.

× I have never had it back in my life since I didn't know how to write on it so I never tried riding a bike.

✓ I never had one when I was a child because I didn't know how to ride it, so I never tried riding a bike.

The student mixed present perfect 'have never had' with a past time reference 'back in my life' and 'when you were a child', so past simple 'never had' is correct. 'Write on it' is incorrect contextually and should be 'ride it'. Also 'one' is a clearer referent for 'bike'. Use consistent past tense for events in childhood. Suggestions: Use past simple for finished past situations (I never had, I didn't know, I never tried). Replace 'write on it' with 'ride it'.

× Well, I would say no because we don't have and many places to ride a bike so it's rarely seen and someone riding a bike on the streets.

✓ Well, I would say no because we don't have many places to ride a bike, so bikes are rarely seen on the streets.

The original has an extra conjunction 'and' after 'don't have' and an incorrect structure 'it's rarely seen and someone riding a bike'. The quantifier 'many' should directly follow 'have'. Rephrase to a clear subject 'bikes' and passive or general statement 'are rarely seen'. Suggestions: Remove the stray 'and', place 'many places' after 'have', and simplify the second clause to 'so bikes are rarely seen on the streets'.

× So that yeah, I wish in the future there will be more popular riders.

✓ So I hope that in the future there will be more people riding bikes.

The phrase 'I wish in the future there will be' mixes 'wish' with a future clause incorrectly; 'wish' typically pairs with past forms for unlikely changes. 'Hope' is appropriate for realistic future expectations. 'More popular riders' is awkward; use 'more people riding bikes' or 'more cyclists'. Suggestions: Use 'I hope' for realistic future hopes and a clearer noun phrase 'people riding bikes'.