Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Reduce filler words (uh) and avoid redundancy. For example, mention the bike's color, who gave it to you, or a memorable experience riding it. Use linking words like “and” or “also” to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I did. It was a small red bike my parents gave me for my seventh birthday, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Give a clearer, more accurate opinion with specific reasons and use linking words. Avoid repeating filler sounds. Start with a direct opinion, then support it with a reason and a brief example or comparison about transport habits in Japan.

例: Not very popular, in my experience. Many people in Japan prefer walking or using public transport because distances in cities are short and trains are convenient, so fewer people own bikes where I live.

× Uh yes, I did. Uh, it was small though, really uh, nice bike.

✓ Uh yes, I did. Uh, it was small though, really a nice bike.

The student omitted the indefinite article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'nice bike'. In English, singular countable nouns normally require an article or determiner. Suggestion: include 'a' or 'the' as appropriate: 'a nice bike'.

× Uh, uh, many people in Japan, uh, go to where they want to go on their foot.

✓ Uh, uh, many people in Japan, uh, go to where they want to go on foot.

The phrase 'on their foot' is incorrect; the idiomatic expression is 'on foot' meaning walking. 'On foot' does not take a possessive. Suggestion: use 'on foot' when saying people walk somewhere.

× Actually, I don't have bike.

✓ Actually, I don't have a bike.

The sentence uses the singular countable noun 'bike' without an article. English requires an article or determiner before singular countable nouns. Suggestion: add 'a' to form 'a bike' or use plural 'bikes' if speaking generally.