Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Fix tense and grammar, be concise, and give a brief reason or memory. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, I often borrowed my neighbor’s bike to ride to the park, which I enjoyed because it gave me a sense of freedom.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid repetition. Keep answers natural and 1–3 sentences long.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many students and commuters use them for short trips. For example, several of my classmates cycle to school every day to save money and avoid traffic.

× No, I don't have a bike when I when I a child when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use simple past 'didn't have' to match the past time. Also remove duplicated words 'when I' and 'a child' redundancy. Suggestion: Use 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.' to be grammatically consistent.

× Maybe because my other my other my other classmates have a bike. That's why I think.

✓ Maybe because many of my classmates have bikes. That's why I think so.

The original repeats 'my other' and uses singular 'a bike' while referring to multiple classmates. Use present simple 'have' correctly but adjust number agreement: 'classmates have bikes' or 'many of my classmates have bikes.' Add 'so' after 'think' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: 'Maybe because many of my classmates have bikes. That's why I think so.'