Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatically correct and expand briefly with a reason or short detail. Avoid repetition and use past tense for childhood. Use one clear topic sentence and one supporting sentence (max 2–3 sentences).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I never learned how to ride. As a result, I usually walked or took public transport to school.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation and repetition, and add one or two specific reasons or an example using linking words (for example, because, therefore, for instance). Use consistent vocabulary (e.g., bikes or scooters) and correct articles. Keep to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, bikes and scooters are very popular in my country because they are cheaper and faster in heavy traffic. For example, many commuters prefer scooters for short trips to work or the market because it’s easier to find parking.

× No, I have no bike because I I have no idea how to ride it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike because I had no idea how to ride one.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so past tense should be used (didn't have, had). Also 'I I' is a repetition; remove duplicate. Use 'one' instead of repeating 'bike' for naturalness. This combines Past tense issue (ID 5) and Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Sentence structure (ID 26). Suggestions: use past simple for past facts and avoid word repetition; replace repeated nouns with 'one' or 'it'.

× Yes, bikes are uh more popular in our country because everyone uh, every, everyone uses use it uh, because, uh, because for the traffic in our country uh, usually persons personally used bikes or scooties in.

✓ Yes, bikes are more popular in our country because everyone uses them. Because of traffic, people usually use bicycles or scooters.

Multiple issues: use present simple for general facts (bikes are, everyone uses) so Present tense issue (ID 6). 'Everyone uses use it' shows a verb duplication and incorrect pronoun: 'everyone' is singular but takes a verb form 'uses' and the object should be 'them' (referring to bikes) or 'bicycles' — this is Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Third person singular issue (ID 2). 'For the traffic' is incorrect preposition/phrase; correct is 'because of traffic' — Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). 'Persons personally used' is awkward and 'used' is past; should be 'people usually use' for habitual present — Past tense issue (ID 5) and word choice. Suggestions: use present simple for habits and general truths, avoid filler words, use 'people' instead of 'persons', and use 'because of traffic' for reason.