Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct the phrasing and reduce hesitation. Add one specific supporting detail and use a linking word if needed. Also correct collocation: say “gave it to me for my birthday” instead of “presented it to my birthday.”

例: Yes — I did. My dad gave me a red bicycle for my tenth birthday, and I rode it to school every day for two years.

提案: Speak more fluently and organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar (people want, ride bikes, feel free). Avoid repetitions and filler words. Provide a concrete example or brief comparison to strengthen your point.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people ride bikes to commute because it is cheap and helps them avoid traffic, and young people often cycle at parks to relax and feel free.

× Yes, uh, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad presented it to my birthday.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My dad gave it to me for my birthday.

The phrase 'presented it to my birthday' is incorrect because 'present' used as a verb is possible but the typical expression is 'give something to someone' and the recipient must be explicit: 'gave it to me'. Also the correct preposition is 'for my birthday' to indicate occasion. Use simple past 'gave' to match past context. Remove filler words like 'uh' for clarity.

× Yes, I do because uh, every person want to uh, spend their time uh, for bike, for riding bike, uh, when they want to feel themselves free in my country.

✓ Yes, I do because every person wants to spend their time riding a bike when they want to feel free in my country.

There are multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('every person' is singular so the verb must be 'wants' — this is both singular/plural and subject-verb agreement but fits ID 1). The phrase 'spend their time for bike' is incorrect preposition and noun form; use 'spend their time riding a bike' or 'on biking'. 'Riding bike' needs an article: 'riding a bike'. 'Feel themselves free' is unnatural; use 'feel free'. Also remove filler 'uh' and repetition for clarity.