Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (uh, umm) and repetition. Use correct verb tense and simple, accurate vocabulary. For example, mention whose bike it was, why it was notable (too big), and a brief memory or result. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was my older brother’s second-hand bike and it was a bit too big for me, so I often struggled to balance. I remember the first time I rode it down a small hill and felt both scared and proud when I didn’t fall.

提案: Answer clearly and give specific reasons or examples. Use plural/singular correctly and choose precise vocabulary (bicycles, motorbikes). Use linking words (especially, because, for example) to connect ideas. Reduce hesitation and correct grammar: say why they are popular (cost, convenience, traffic) and where you see them.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially motorbikes. They are common because they are affordable and can navigate through heavy traffic easily. For example, you can see large numbers of motorbikes on city streets and near markets during rush hour.

× Yes, I have a bike uh, when I resume travel and it's it's a second bike from my umm, elder bridges umm, it, it is a little big for me at that time and I remember the first time.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was a second-hand bike from my older brother. It was a little big for me at that time and I remember the first time I rode it.

Errors: mixture of present and past tenses and wrong word choices. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when you were a child' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6: Present tense issue and 5: Past tense issue). 'Resume travel' is incorrect and likely intended 'when I resumed traveling' but does not fit context; replaced with a clearer phrasing. 'Second bike' should be 'second-hand bike' or 'a second bike from my older brother' and 'elder bridges' is incorrect word choice; corrected to 'older brother' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12: Incorrect use of pronouns/words). Repeated 'it's it's' and extra fillers removed. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for childhood events, use correct nouns ('brother' instead of 'bridges'), and use 'second-hand' if meaning used bike. Use simple past verbs ('had', 'was', 'remembered' or 'remember') to describe past experiences.

× Yes, I think so pies is a pop are popular and especially the motorbikes and a much popular and you can see a lot of uh motorbikes, uh, go through the the low umm on on the road.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are popular, especially motorbikes; they are very common and you can see a lot of motorbikes on the road.

Errors: incorrect subject-verb agreement and word choice. 'Pies is a pop are popular' is garbled; correct form is 'Bikes are popular' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1: Singular and plural issue and 27: Subject-verb agreement errors). 'A much popular' is ungrammatical; use 'very common' or 'very popular' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'Go through the the low on on the road' is incorrect preposition and phrasing; corrected to 'on the road' (Grammar Problem Type ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). Suggestions: use plural noun 'bikes' with plural verb 'are', choose correct modifiers like 'very' or 'common', and use the preposition 'on' with 'the road'.