Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Shorten and polish sentences, use correct tense and word choice, and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘liked’, ‘at night’), avoid redundancy (don’t repeat ‘had a bike’), and keep within 3–4 sentences for fluency. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas.

例: I had a bike when I was a child; my father gave it to me for my 12th birthday. I often rode it on quiet streets at night because it felt peaceful and fun, and those rides are one of my happiest childhood memories.

提案: Be concise and choose accurate vocabulary and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one specific example or statistic. Avoid incorrect or unclear phrases (‘Labour Party’ is misleading) and fix grammar (e.g., ‘people are not well off’, ‘use bikes’). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan because they are affordable and cheaper to run than cars. For example, many low-income workers and delivery riders use motorbikes for daily travel since high fuel and car costs make cars impractical.

× In my childhood, I like to ride the bike in the empty streets at the night, which was really enjoyable and very memorable.

✓ In my childhood, I liked to ride my bike in the empty streets at night, which was really enjoyable and very memorable.

The sentence mixes present tense 'like' with past context 'In my childhood' and 'was'. Use past tense 'liked' for consistency. Also use possessive 'my bike' rather than 'the bike' and remove the article before 'night' ('at night' is the correct idiom). Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense and use correct idiomatic expressions. ','grammar_problem_type_id':5},{

× Yes, as I live in Pakistan, here the financial condition of the people are not very good.

✓ Yes, as I live in Pakistan, the financial condition of the people here is not very good.

The subject 'the financial condition' is singular, so the verb should be singular 'is' not 'are'. Also 'here' is better placed after 'people' or at end; reordering improves clarity. Suggestion: identify the true subject and ensure verb agrees in number. ','grammar_problem_type_id':27},{

× So mostly the Labour Party or the people that are not well off usually uses bike for their major transportation because of the high fuel prices they can't use.

✓ So mostly the Labour Party or people who are not well off usually use bikes as their main means of transportation because they cannot afford fuel.

Several issues: 'uses' must agree with plural subject 'Labour Party or people'—better use 'use'. 'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally. 'Major transportation' is unnatural; use 'main means of transportation'. 'they can't use' is unclear; corrected to 'they cannot afford fuel'. Also replace 'that' with 'who' for people. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with the subject, use plural nouns for general statements, and choose natural collocations. ','grammar_problem_type_id':1}]}andelier