Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, natural response using correct tense and concise phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have a bike as a child.”) and then add one short reason or brief detail if needed. Use simple past for past situations and avoid redundant words like “small and child.”

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school or shared rides with neighbors.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific supporting details with clear linking words. Correct grammar and word choice: say who uses bikes and why, and provide one or two concise examples. Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “also.” Avoid vague phrases and redundant repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Afghanistan because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many students and workers ride bikes to school or to the market each day, especially in smaller towns where traffic and parking are limited.

× No, unfortunately I was not having a bike when I was small and child.

✓ No, unfortunately I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The student used past continuous 'was not having' incorrectly for a past state; English uses simple past 'did not have' to describe possession in the past. Also 'small and child' is ungrammatical; correct phrase is 'a child'. Suggestion: use simple past for past states (I had / I did not have) and say 'when I was a child'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, I am from Afghanistan. Usually the boys are more and most popular among other vehicles in my country because people use the bikes to go to their work daily.

✓ Yes, I am from Afghanistan. Usually bikes are more popular than other vehicles in my country because people use them to go to work daily.

Multiple issues: 'the boys are more and most popular' is incorrect — likely meant 'bikes are more popular'. This is a sentence structure and comparison error (use 'more popular than'). 'The bikes' with 'people use the bikes' is awkward; use plural 'bikes' or pronoun 'them'. 'Go to their work' is wordy — common expression is 'go to work'. Suggestions: identify the subject correctly (bikes), use correct comparison 'more popular than', and use 'go to work' or 'go to their workplaces' if necessary. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Most of the people and also most of the students to go to their school, they will use a bike.

✓ Most people, and most students in particular, use a bike to get to school.

Original has incorrect infinitive phrase 'to go to their school' inserted awkwardly and unnecessary pronoun 'they' causing sentence structure errors. Also 'use a bike' is acceptable but plural 'use bikes' or 'use a bike' with 'most people' is less natural; 'use a bike' here implies typical behavior. Tense should be simple present for habitual actions: 'use'. Suggestion: keep simple present for habits, remove redundant pronoun, and place time/place phrase correctly (to get to school). Grammar problem type ID:26