Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and filler words, correct tense agreement (use past tense consistently), and add one or two specific details using linking words. Keep answers to no more than five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike with frilly ribbons tied to the handlebars, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. Because my street was quiet, I could practice tricks and build confidence, which made me more independent.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, use clearer linking words and provide specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrases like "in here"; use "in my country". Keep sentences compact and use a wider range of vocabulary such as "popular," "affordable," "commute," or "practical."

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because public transport can be expensive. For example, many commuters choose bicycles for short trips since they are affordable and help avoid traffic during rush hour.

× Yes I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked about a past condition ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'have' (present) is incorrect. Change to 'did' to match simple past. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural punctuation.

× I had a bike, umm, it was pink and it has frilly ribbons on the place where I was putting my hands.

✓ I had a bike. It was pink and it had frilly ribbons where I held the handlebars.

The sentence mixes past ('had', 'was') with present ('has') and contains awkward phrasing ('on the place where I was putting my hands'). All actions refer to the past, so use past tense consistently: change 'has' to 'had'. Also split into two sentences for clarity and replace 'place where I was putting my hands' with natural phrasing 'where I held the handlebars.' This improves clarity and grammatical consistency.

× I think bikes are preferred by people because usually public transport is a little bit expensive in here.

✓ I think bikes are preferred by people because public transport is usually a little bit expensive here.

The phrase 'in here' is incorrect in this context; 'here' is the appropriate adverb. Also the adverb 'usually' is more natural before the adjective phrase 'a little bit expensive' when placed as 'public transport is usually a little bit expensive here.' Reordering improves naturalness and correctness.