Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give concise, specific reasons using correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid repetition and grammar mistakes (e.g., “soaking on” → “keen on” or “fond of”). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences. For example, say you think bikes are less popular than motorcycles, explain why (convenience, traffic, culture), and give a brief example or contrast.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in Vietnam compared with motorcycles. This is mainly because motorcycles are faster and more convenient for commuting, especially during rush hour. Also, buying and maintaining a motorcycle is often seen as more practical, so most people choose that option.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

No grammatical error; the sentence correctly uses past simple to ask about possession in the past.

× Not really, I would say did it simply because Vietnamese people are soaking on riding motorcycles and that's why you see a whole lot of motorcycles on the street, especially in the rush hour. Whenever you go outside that is.

✓ Not really. I'd simply say that Vietnamese people prefer riding motorcycles, and that's why you see a whole lot of motorcycles on the street, especially during rush hour whenever you go outside.

Multiple issues combined: incorrect sentence structure, wrong verb choice 'soaking on', incorrect use of 'did it', and awkward fragments. Suggestion: break into clear clauses, use contraction 'I'd' for 'I would', use 'simply say that' to introduce reason, replace 'soaking on riding' with 'prefer riding' to express habit, use 'during rush hour' instead of 'in the rush hour', and combine the final fragment into the previous sentence. This yields a grammatically correct, natural response in present simple generalization about habits.