Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and tense consistency, make the response more concise and natural, and add a brief supporting detail using a linking word. Use past tense for past events and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child; my father bought it for me, but I never learned to ride it because I couldn’t keep my balance. As a result, I usually walked to school instead.

提案: Remove fillers (e.g., “uh”), choose more precise vocabulary, and use linking words to connect ideas. Provide a clear main point and one specific supporting reason or example to sound more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular. In many cities there are shared-bike programs, and many people use them to commute because they are cheaper and faster than taking a car in traffic.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and my father bought it for me, but I never learned how to use it because it was hard for me to find my balance.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; my father bought it for me, but I never learned how to use it because I found it hard to keep my balance.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past-time marker 'when I was a child.' Use past tense 'had' for possession in the past. Also replace 'it was hard for me to find my balance' with 'I found it hard to keep my balance' for natural phrasing and correct verb choice. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to past events in past tense and use idiomatic expressions like 'keep my balance.'

× Yes, I think so. Bikes are now a common tool for people to commute and uh, we have shared bikes in big cities. People like to use bikes because it's cheaper.

✓ Yes, I think so. Bikes are now a common means of commuting, and we have shared bikes in big cities. People like to use bikes because they are cheaper.

Replace 'a common tool for people to commute' with 'a common means of commuting' for idiomatic accuracy. Change the contraction 'it's' (it is) to 'they are' to agree with plural 'bikes' (subject-verb agreement). Ensure pronoun matches plural noun. Keep present tense consistent for general facts.