Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và có cấu trúc hơn. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + ngắn gọn), sau đó cung cấp 1–2 câu bổ sung giải thích cụ thể. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng sai (ví dụ “my best friends” không phù hợp ở đây; “received it as a birthday gift” đúng hơn). Sử dụng liên từ khi cần để câu mạch lạc (for example, because, so). Giữ độ dài không quá 5 câu.

例: Yes, I did. I received a bicycle as a birthday gift from my parents when I was about eight, and I loved riding it with my neighborhood friends. Because it was my first independent way to travel, I practiced every afternoon and became quite confident riding on small roads.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu chính xác về từ vựng và cấu trúc. Tránh lỗi như “PIE” hoặc “Vietnamese” khi muốn nói “Vietnam” hoặc “bicycles”. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi nêu lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng liên từ (for example, because, therefore) để liên kết ý. Hãy cung cấp một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: nhiều người dùng xe đạp để đi học, đi làm hoặc ở nông thôn).

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country. Many students and workers use them for short trips because they are cheap and convenient, and you can often see people cycling to school or the market. For example, when I was at school I usually rode my bike to class every day because it only took me ten minutes.

× Yes, absolutely. When I was a child, my best friends, if it's for me, like a gift in my birthday and I really thought about it.

✓ Yes, absolutely. When I was a child, my best friend gave me a bike as a birthday present and I really liked it.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and has unclear structure. 'my best friends' should be singular 'my best friend' if referring to one person; 'if it's for me' is incorrect and ambiguous and should be 'gave me'; 'like a gift in my birthday' is incorrect phrasing — use 'as a birthday present'; 'I really thought about it' is incorrect contextually and should be 'I really liked it'. Suggestion: identify the subject clearly, use correct verb phrases for giving ('gave me'), and use the standard noun phrase 'birthday present'.

× Yes, I think PIE is super popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country.

'PIE' appears to be a typo for 'bike(s)' — use the correct noun and plural form 'bikes' since 'are' is used. 'super popular' is informal; 'very popular' is clearer. Suggestion: ensure correct word choice and matching number (singular/plural) with the verb.

× You can see it's everywhere and I usually use it to go to school.

✓ You can see them everywhere and I usually use one to go to school.

'It's' (it is) refers to a singular item, but 'everywhere' implies plural; use 'them' to refer to bikes collectively. In the second clause, 'it' is ambiguous; use 'one' to mean 'a bike'. Also 'use one to go to school' clarifies habitual action. Suggestion: match pronouns to count (singular/plural) and use 'one' to refer to an individual item within a group.

× So I think this is very popular in Vietnamese.

✓ So I think they are very popular in Vietnam.

'This is' incorrectly refers to bikes; use plural 'they are'. 'in Vietnamese' incorrectly uses language adjective instead of the country name; use 'in Vietnam' to indicate location. Suggestion: use correct demonstrative/pronoun for plurality and the proper noun for country names.