Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevaplarınızı daha düzenli ve doğal hale getirmek için aynı bilgiyi tekrarlamaktan kaçının; kısa bir konu cümlesi ile başlayın, ardından olayın nedenini ve duygularınızı mantıklı bir sıra ile ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, so) kullanarak akışı güçlendirin ve cümle sayısını 3–4 cümle ile sınırlayın.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but it was stolen before I could really learn to ride it. Because of that I never learned properly and felt very upset at the time. I remember crying a lot and telling my parents how much I wanted to ride it.

提案: Daha doğal ve akıcı cevaplar için daha uygun kelimeler ve net örnekler kullanın; gereksiz ifadelerden kaçının (ör. "you know") ve bağlaçlarla nedenleri/örnekleri mantıklı sırayla verin. Ayrıca tek kelimelik genel ifadeler yerine spesifik kullanım örnekleri (işe gitme, okul, spor) ekleyin.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I see many people cycling to work and school every day, and others use them at weekends for exercise and leisure. Because cycling is cheap and convenient in crowded cities, it remains a common choice for many people.

× Yes, I did, but before I had the chance to properly use it, it was stolen and I really cried about it.

✓ Yes, I did, but before I had the chance to use it properly, it was stolen and I was really upset about it.

The original sentence misorders adverbial phrase 'properly' and uses 'cried about it' which is grammatical but sounds unnatural in this context. 'Use it properly' is the common word order (verb + object + adverb). Also 'I was really upset about it' is a more natural past-tense expression of emotional reaction than 'I really cried about it'. Suggestion: Place adverbs after the object when modifying the verb, and use a more appropriate emotional verb phrase in past tense.

× But no, I couldn't use it.

✓ But no, I couldn't use it.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and fits the context. No change needed. Explanation: 'Couldn't' correctly expresses inability in the past, so keep as is.

× I didn't learn how to use it at all because it was stolen.

✓ I didn't learn how to use it at all because it was stolen.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and coherent with the situation. Explanation: The negative past simple 'didn't learn' correctly indicates that the action did not happen in the past; no correction required.

× Yes, I think they are popular in my country because every day I see lots of them in the street.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular in my country because I see many of them in the streets every day.

Preference for 'many of them' or 'lots of them' is stylistic; main issue is word order and count expression. Use 'many' with count nouns and plural 'streets' or 'on the street' with a habitual time expression after: 'in the streets every day' or 'on the street every day'. Suggestion: Place 'every day' after the verb phrase or at the end, and use 'many of them' for clarity.

× They are using bikes for transportation, they are using bikes for fun.

✓ They use bikes for transportation and for fun.

Continuous present 'are using' implies an action happening right now; habitual use should be expressed with the simple present 'use'. Also repetition can be reduced by joining clauses with 'and'. Suggestion: Use simple present for habits: 'They use bikes for transportation and for fun.'

× You know, it really is a complex device and has a multi use so it is popular in my country.

✓ You know, it really is a versatile device and has multiple uses, so it is popular in my country.

Problems: 'complex device' is not the best collocation for a bicycle; 'multi use' is incorrect phrase and should be 'multiple uses' or 'multi-use' as a compound adjective before a noun. 'Versatile' better conveys that bikes serve many purposes. Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses. Suggestion: Use appropriate adjective 'versatile' and plural noun 'uses' to indicate different purposes.